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Moonglow (Inspired by Meadowmuse's "Her Bath")
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Moonglow (Inspired by Meadowmuse's "Her Bath") |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments 
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Moonglow's held in swells of steam < !signature-->While waters softly churn Moments slow in liquid glimmer And ivory candles burn. Bubbles float upon the breath Of Autumn's wafting breeze, Clinging to her hair of gold As threads of starlight tease. Droplets slide upon her skin Touched in snowy hue Freesia hints within the air Mingling with crystal dew. Daydreams fall as water cools And fantasy drains away Sweet release found in her bath Will come another day... Silken sheets fold 'round her form Now falling into sleep Moonglow's held within her eyes And her soul the stars will keep. *Krista Knutson* "You never lose by loving. You always lose by holding back." -Barbara DeAngelis [This message has been edited by Alwye (edited 08-27-2000).] |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Magnificent!! So beautiful...I love your use of imagery in this Krista!  |
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Dawn Eclipse Senior Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 637The Horsehead Nebula |
Krissa~ One of my favorite poems. I like the line... "Moonglow's held within her eyes And her soul the stars will keep." beautiful poem.  "Forget regret, or life is yours to miss. No other course, no other way... No day but today" ~Broadway Musical RENT~ *Cassandra Roseen* |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Krista~ What a lovely inspired piece. I'm sure Claire will enjoy it too ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Dusk Treader
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since 1999-06-18
Posts 1187St. Paul, MN |
Mmm.. Wonderful imagery! I feel ready for a nice hot bath now.. I adored the first verse and this one too: "Daydreams fall as water cools And fantasy drains away Sweet release found in her bath Will come another day..." I love, "And fantasy drains away." Water is like our fantasies and dreams, shifting and changing and flowing... Glittering and refreshing... Anyways, LOL, I loved this poem! Abrahm Simons "Keep on dreamin' boy 'cause when you stop dreaming it's time to die" - Blind Melon |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
*****SIGH***** |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Just wonderful. Be well Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Poet deVine- Thank you so much my friend! Cassers- It is your soul that the stars keep dearie...I'm glad you liked that line. Thanks for your kind comments! Marge- Thank you very much! Dusk- Water is indeed like our fantasies....ever moving and changing. I'm glad you liked this, love. Mark- ***smile*** glad you liked! Kethry- Thank you! *Krista Knutson* "Wheresoever you go, go with all your heart." -Confucious |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
"Silken sheets fold 'round her form Now falling into sleep Moonglow's held within her eyes And her soul the stars will keep" Ah, Krista...what an ethereal scene, one of peace and contemplation, of delicious sensuality and innocence found. I absolutely love this, and am very pleased that you thought enough of my poem to compose this beauty. You are, indeed, a gifted poet, and are on your way to the stars. All my best, Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Krista, this is a wonderful piece! (as usual!) I love the images you've weaved with this one. Such a magical piece... keep 'em coming! "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
Oh my! This was such a serene and beautiful poem. I was in that bath, experiencing it all. Wonderful writing and use of descriptive terms and imagery, all to capture a mere moment in time. I loved this ~Heather |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Meadowmuse- Thank you so much for your kindness. You inspire me greatly and it means the world to me that you like my work. Erica- Thanks a bunch my friend, I'm glad you liked it! X Angel- Why thank you, I happen to love your work also. *Krista Knutson* "Wheresoever you go, go with all your heart." -Confucious |
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