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Losing Sleep
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Losing Sleep |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas 
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by poetFemmeFatale Eyes closed tight - I toss and turn, trying to clear my head Images & memories, come rushing through instead. I see your face, hear your laughter, feel your tender kiss - Remembering the way you smile - I can't fight all this... I'm losing sleep, of this I'm sure - it's all because of you - What I would give to have you here - gaze in your eyes so blue. Walk with you to anywhere - hold your hand in mine Hear your laughter, taste your kiss & stop the hands of time... Eyes closed tight - I toss and turn - God please help me sleep - I pull my blanket up real tight & softly start to weep... Restlessly, I fall asleep escaping all of this - But even in my dreams, of course it's your lips that I kiss. [This message has been edited by poetFemmeFatale (edited 08-26-2000).] |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
This is a wonderful piece! I don't know of anyone who could not relate...  --You can either take me as I am...or you can watch me as I go.-- |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Gen, wonderfully written beautiful and haunting tender and sad. "I concede relationships have left me weak Won't be here so I don't care Look for something worthy to replace my guilt" Mansun legacy |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wonderful rhythm and flow PoetFemme! Your desire and longing come through achingly in these words ... beautifully written! Best wishes, /Kit |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Achingly real,and so perfectly expressed. Catalinamoon |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
yepers that is it.......that is the reason that I dont even try to sleep. No escaping it and when I wake up I feel like I just ran a marathon. Beautiful words from you this day. Loved the flow and the way it just sort of leads one through with a direct approach. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
This is so very pretty, Poet Femme... ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
Femme...whoa.....that there is one lucky feller, even if he doesn't yet realize it. That last line: 'But even in my dreams, of course it's your lips that I kiss.' just summed it up for me....wonderfully crafted. I do look forward to reading more of your material...time to add ya to my library, if'n ya don't mind and stuff.  |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Gen, I wish I could tell you that they stop. . . but. . . *sigh* Wonderful. . . ------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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JnR4eva Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 377Bronx, NY |
what a beautiful piece u have here...i love the emotions that u have put forth in this piece..it spills over onto my compter desk...truly is sad though...i can only image thats how i may if i lost my love...great writing . "my love is my motivation my love is my inspiration perception of this poem is your interpretation" -- rlt |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
*Looking around eagerly* Was this poem for me???? lol - Great writing, Femme - you have such a smooth rhythm in your poems - they always flow so well, as this poem so clearly illustrates. Very romantic, too! |
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Brent Hotchkin Junior Member
since 2000-02-15
Posts 42Florida,USA |
Excelent poem Gen. I expect nothing less from you. I think this is a poem allmost everyone can relate to. At one point in their lives of many for those who choose to give everything. I will think of this poem as I try to sleep tonight. Maybe it will help. |
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Eddie de Jong Junior Member
since 2000-07-31
Posts 27 |
Interesting to see the two different interpretations from the replies posted. For me, the word poignant leaps to mind . Very well expressed. |
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