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Tormenta are Polvo
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Tormenta are Polvo |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas 
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Well, de Vine, I took your suggestion and tried my hand at it...not too happy with how it came out, but here it is. The sadistic sun beat mercilessly the sand. Thermals rising in protest, Stirring the scorching soil. Convection breezes stir grains Sending spirals and spins, Picking up speed and sand, Feeding voraciously off the rising heat: A horizontal avalanche of dirty sand Rising like Babel to usurp the sun, Churning, writhing, a wall of pain Scything scree, stripping shrubs, God's bead-blaster taking Flecks of paint from cowering cars, A blinding wall of power Filling our world From East to West. A saguaro snaps On the TV screen Before the power fails; And as windows sing and shudder I understand what they said, 'Sometimes, Nature is a Mutha.' Alicat |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
AliCat~ This is wonderful ! Gave me pause for thought - and wrapped it up with a smile !  I like it ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
I don't know why you're not happy with it, I am  Marvelous! |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
It's good!! But you haven't conveyed the sting of the sand in your eyes when the wind blows a dust storm into town! LOL I liked it..and we escaped another storm tonight! |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Alicat ... I enjoyed reading this thank's for sharing!Coco |
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