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Hand In Hand
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Hand In Hand |
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Brandyn Sand Member
since 2000-04-21
Posts 82Columbia, SC 
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You and I, my love, together are one - Just like the sky and the morning sun. I am the torch, you are its fire; You are the current, I am the wire. Apart we would be like a bird without flight, A rose void of scent, the day without night. Who has experienced great joy without laughter Or a memorable tale with no. . . ever after? And just as there is no land without sea, I cannot imagine a you without me. For R, the love of my life. You've only been gone for a couple of hours, yet I miss you so much already.  |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Fabulous poem. I liked the comparisons. Be well Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Brandyn - this poem is so tight! And that is meant in a good way. The similes are so right om the mark, and it all ties together perfectly, including the order in which it is all written. Terrific writing, lady. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Brandyn~ Enjoyed the thoughts. Particularly this - 'You are the current, I am the wire.' Now is that anyway to conduct yourself !  ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Brandyn Sand Member
since 2000-04-21
Posts 82Columbia, SC |
K & L - thank you so very much for the kind words. And, Marge, that was just too cute!  |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
I loved this..very beautiful walking hand in hand... ~~soft smiles Maureen |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Brandyn , a beautiful and tender poem, very romantic. "I concede relationships have left me weak Won't be here so I don't care Look for something worthy to replace my guilt" Mansun legacy |
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JnR4eva Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 377Bronx, NY |
what a beautiful poem you have here...i just find the comparisons remarkablely sweet and heartfelt, and overall..i just think it's just beautiful...i hope he comes back soon to you  "my love is my motivation my love is my inspiration perception of this poem is your interpretation" -- rlt |
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