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T McCoy
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since 2000-07-24
Posts 186


0 posted 2000-08-25 02:49 PM




can't bench this weight
from my chest
can't press it
over my head
impulses
denied
and parts of me
die
i punch holes
in my world
and let rage
fill them in
prey and pray
for an eye
for an eye
feel like half
of a man
understand
that i can't
just take that
from them
when they do that
to me
man it pisses
me off
and it's makin
me crazy
i just can't
calm down
no i just  
don't know how
i'm about to become
all the things
you've undone
with 5 years
of love
it's a shame
it's a shove
back in time
in my mind
on my face
and it shows
so it goes
i've never started
a fight
but i'm hopin
tonight
someone looks at me
wrong
when they see me
seeing them
with my brand new
old face
staring
and stomping
and smashing
around
just looking
for someone
a face
in the crowd
i don't care
if i lose
if i bleed
or i win
i just need
to burn off
a little
bit of  
adrenaline
understand
that i can't
get this weight
off my chest
man i've tried
parts have died
i punch holes
in my world
nothing good
fills them in
and i've prayed
now i'll prey
for an eye
for an eye
with a smile
on my face
understand
that i've never
been able
to take that
from them
when they did that
to me
now they're doing
it to you
and i
just can't calm down
no i
just don't know how
and i don't like
what i see
in the mirror
when i see me
it scares me
that fire
is back
and it's
burning
inside me
and i'm
well passed
pissed off man
i'm half
F*****g crazy







[This message has been edited by T McCoy (edited 08-25-2000).]

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ggrn3
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since 2000-08-17
Posts 433
Nahunta Georgia U.S.
1 posted 2000-08-25 02:58 PM


T.McCoy
  You have written this one well as you always do, but I did notice a few swears in there.  Anyway, they detract little from this one.
Exquisite poem.

Garfield

Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
2 posted 2000-08-25 03:24 PM


Outside from the title drawing me in, your reference to roses would be?...

Whew, T. The anger in this reaches out...I'm glad you're not upset with me!

Jenn E
Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589
Kelowna, BC, Canada
3 posted 2000-08-25 03:34 PM


I feel your anger and frustration here Tony. I can relate.......you just get so freakin angry you think you are going to explode......mad at the world. Funny I read this on a day when i just want to scream at this world and tell it how much I ****** HATE IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Can I scream here? GRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRR!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Whew, better.
I love that you are not afraid to express all your emotions here, gives me courage to maybe do the same. This probably isn't helping you but LIFE SUCKS!  

NOW on a posative note for you you are only HALF f***** crazy........SO you still have the other half so you ar'nt doing half bad!.
In my thoughts my friend.........
Jenn E


Butterflies_dont_cry
Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733
Michigan
4 posted 2000-08-25 04:04 PM


T* This ripped and bled.....I hope things get better soon~



[This message has been edited by Butterflies_dont_cry (edited 08-25-2000).]

T McCoy
Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 186

5 posted 2000-08-25 04:15 PM


garfield*  thanks!  hmm...the swearing though...i think it adds to it...i mean, that's what i had to say...i can't lie to myself right?  

sunshine*  roses..?  nothing else made better sense  

Jenn*  thank you!  glad ya got ta GRRR!!!
aw but life doesn't suck...just some of the things in it...

Tony


angelswing
Senior Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 705
United Kingdom
6 posted 2000-08-25 04:16 PM


I can understand what your saying, I hate it when I get in that mood, The best thing to do is remember that all the people who give you hastle are below your level - Or else they wouldn't make you get in that state in the first place . Great poem, your anger makes your feelings flow, I enjoyed it .
Thanks .
L.of.L. Tom .


Don't try, do or do not, there is no try .
- Master Yoda -

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
7 posted 2000-08-25 04:28 PM


I've been able to get lots of frustration and anger out by writing also...perhaps in the long run a better way to deal with the anger...really liked the title...James
jwesley
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563
Spring, Texas
8 posted 2000-08-25 05:02 PM


Hey man...been there, done that and I've got your back door so do your darnest!  I can relate!

Well stated, carried, put...YES!  

...and later we cry.


jwesley

sarahC
Member
since 2000-06-07
Posts 84
Michigan
9 posted 2000-08-25 05:26 PM


T~~~great way to get your anger out...and you are right life doesn't suck...you WILL get through this....and remember...somebody out there needs YOU...so stay strong my friend..loved it anyway....

Just me

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