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Chemistry Magnification
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Chemistry Magnification |
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Sunshine
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Chemistry Magnification You adore your mate, you really do I love my partner I’ve been true we’ve been through the bygone gates of passage saw all passages complete Yet when you enter I nearly weep for you my love have made full sweep of my emotions now they’re raw you looked through me you really saw my soul my heart and here I stand with a ring on my hand …you make me want to remove it. You’ve given clues to my mate tried to get him to relate told him “you’ll lose her tread carefully…” but you didn’t tell him you had the heart of me… you didn’t tell your friend you could hear my soul you didn’t tell him it’s your goal to someday stand in for him that the chemistry speaks within. Chemistry magnified by ageless charm can a person have more than one love one soul’s mate and why are you put here isn’t it too late? Shouldn’t we be dealt an evil hand ‘tho we’ve not spoken of this passionate command I glimpse it in your eyes it’s not a dream you predict it in my eyes you make each moment seem magnified intense chemistry burns stomach churns that they will know my partner your mate so we will wait… and see. Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Be Oh so careful...the wrong combination of chemicals will explode!!!!! Great writing, my friend!!! Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Chemistry or Wizardry... I love it all... regards, sudhir |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
karilea - What a subject!!! You laid it out so well - I can feel the tension, and the energy. Great job! |
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susanbartee Member
since 2000-08-15
Posts 119Channelview, TX USA |
Such emotion and tension. Written so well. This must be a hard situation for anyone to be in. I felt so very much heart in these words. Great work! |
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Sunshine
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Sunny1 - I'm sure you know ALL about chemical reaction!... Sudhir, we all love you, too... Mike, tension, energy, elements...whew! Susan...you gotta have heart...thanks! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
mmm. mmm. hmmm. yep. very well expressed...speaking strictly hypothetically, of course...*wink* |
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Sunshine
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Serenity...serene, it is not... |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Whew, this is some powerful stuff. I can feel the rapid heartbeat when he comes into the room. Take care. catalinamoon |
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Sunshine
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Cat, you pussy-footed into the room, did you? Whew - watch out for the sparks! |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
such incredible tension cannot go unrelieved - you may have gone past the point of no return - I will pray for a relatively peaceful resolution of this - I'm not unsympathetic - just scared for you - hindsight is always 20/20 |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
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Imagination is a powerful playmate, my friends...Mr. Yeats, no need to worry... |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
Sunshine, Very good writing!!! Indeed, you have captured a "chemistry" in poem. VERY well written and enjoyed. Love, Marcy |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Sunshine, this is full of powerful emotions. . . it's hard when you're in this place isn't it?? You don't know where to turn to. . . or to whom. . . Excellent writing. . . ------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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sonjes Senior Member
since 2000-02-18
Posts 564North Carolina |
Oh wow!!! Afer reading through the responses, I have to applaud twice as loud...if this was strictly from the imagination, I am in complete awe!!!!! Don't care what people say Just follow your own way Don't give up and use the chance To return to innocence. -Enigma |
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Sunshine
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Marcy, what an illuminating concept...and I failed chemistry! LOL! Thanks! Sven, choices, choices...thank you! Sonjes, absolutely loving each clap of your hand, thank you! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
O.K. so you made this up...right... I have felt some of these feelings I tend to believe that if you really admire and appreciate and have a respectful relationship with the one you are with you are not as tempted to look around for someone to supply those needs... not necessarily chemistry...just needs desiring to me meet....I don't know...just some experiences...interesting poem...James |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
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James,...sincerely...enjoyed...all of your thoughts...keep 'em coming...{~,^} Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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