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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2000-08-24 08:01 AM


His words are still warm
in my heart as I
brush the sleep from my eyes
my hand brushes lips
I'm awake in surprise
to find I
start
this day smiling.

Just to think
that he might be
just a little fond of me...
makes wonder
I just might be
okay, after all...
through the crumple of sheets,
and brushing of teeth,
I startle myself
with a glimpse
mine own eyes--
like the rustle of curtain,
the flicker of shade,
in a house dusty and silent,
the owner away,
I startle myself
as I think--
someone's there...

© Copyright 2000 serenity blaze - All Rights Reserved
Sudhir Iyer
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since 2000-04-26
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1 posted 2000-08-24 08:03 AM


O Serene One,
you see poetry in everything that moves and even in everything that doesn't move... you find poetry in everything that is...

wonderful...

regards,
sudhir

Chanson
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since 2000-08-19
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Up Creek w/Out Paddle
2 posted 2000-08-24 08:07 AM


Hello serenity. Your poem is so peaceful and touching. A lovely wake-up read this morning  ...chanson~


serenity blaze
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3 posted 2000-08-24 08:16 AM


sudhir and chanson, I thank you much--just read this half asleep poem and I'm half laughing now, I wonder, is it a good thing or a bad thing to be startled by signs of life in your own eyes...methinks I worry too much...thank you, yawning and smiling, off now for coffee and poetry...
Local Rebel
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4 posted 2000-08-24 10:02 AM


Just to think
that he might be
just a little fond of me...


change the he to a she and I know just how you feel.... been there...  

poetFemmeFatale
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5 posted 2000-08-24 10:08 AM


Wow oh wow!  I had to read this through a time or two, to allow the spooky magic of it to sink in!  LOL  I can see this, I really can.  And yes, it is okay to see life in one's own eyes...it's completely ok.   "It's about darn time," I've said to myself in the mirror before!  LOL  This is a really unique piece here, the style, even the content.  Gives that wonderful scent of a new beginning...aaahhh.  Thanks for sharing!
Paula Finn
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missouri
6 posted 2000-08-24 10:35 AM


Serenity...you are writing my heart with this one...something so new so beautiful that its kinda hard to belive just yet...
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By the sea
7 posted 2000-08-24 12:14 PM


serenity,

I loved this...I could "see" everything you described.  Such a nice poem  

Michael





Butterflies_dont_cry
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8 posted 2000-08-24 12:19 PM



I loved this.....amazing what the heart of
another can bring to us.....beautiful work~


serenity blaze
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9 posted 2000-08-24 04:40 PM


Thank you muchly...the joy is mine, today...
Grateful as ever, for all of your thoughtful replies...Hugs to all.

Effigy
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disbelief
10 posted 2000-08-24 04:52 PM


Great I loved it.
SpitFire
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11 posted 2000-08-28 01:05 PM


~Serenity,...*sigh*. Where do I begin? This is umm...it's ...so...I don't know,...real to me. I'm saving this one. Aaghh!!! You've nailed this. Please take care you. *Peace.
Martie
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12 posted 2000-08-28 02:02 PM


Serenity--I really enjoyed this look into your morning mirror and your heart...sometimes we see ourselves so much we forget to really look.
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