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Wish of a Former Tree
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Wish of a Former Tree |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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Wish of a Former Tree Please cover me with your love For my body aches for a touch Please shower me with your love, For my form desires this much. Please come to me and be my guest, Please perch on me, O dear dove, What I was now is, a bench to rest, But my soul still is a stub of love. Place yourself on my dead shape, I am chiselled to hold your grace, Seat your body over me and gape At the smile carved upon my face. Rest a little, for later you've to fly Into the vastness of deep blue sky, This solemn wish, please do comply, Then if you must, leave to soar high. Rest for a few moments on this wood, Broken remains of where I once stood. ~~~ [This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (edited 08-24-2000).] |
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juliet_2u Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 1125North Carolina |
Sudhir this is so lovely. Amazing as always. Juls |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Sudhir~ You've set a sweet smile upon my face this beautiful morning. The wood of life speaks to me just as you've described. Many times in the swamps of the South we walk and stand upon the Cypress stumps and recall the voices of our people. The wonderful song master, John Anderson, said it best in his stirring 'Seminole Wind'. The wood of many trees across our land ... speak. Enjoyed so much. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Juliet, as always I thank you for your kind words...  Marge, I am so glad that I could provide a reason for a smile... thanks regards, sudhir |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Oh sudhir...doing my happy screen dance for you!!! absolutely stunning piece of work, loved your imagery and thought, and my gosh, Sudhir, just gotta love you too! This one prints for my little book, if ya don't mind... |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
Sudhir, your poem is filled with deep expression. So very nice ....chanson~ |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
This is very sensual and soft, Sudhir. Take care, Corinne |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
O serene one... did I do it then, make you do a screen dance... WOW... of course you can print this one... thanks a lot  chanson, Thanks for reading and responding... Corinne, A lovely interpretation, indeed... love the way you read poetry... thanks regards, sudhir |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
I loved this..it's beautiful in many ways...I have a dying tree here..hmmm a dying love too ( what a coincidence) anyway I am in mourning over both for the comfort from that tree these last 20 years and the 30 for the loving memories that will soon be only those and never to be shared again...oh shoot..don't know what I am trying to say here...loved your poem ~~softly laughing at my rambling Maureen |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Thank you Maureen for coming by and sharing the part of your life... not that was not rambling... I am so glad that you felt you could share that piece of information... regards, sudhir |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sudhir, I have a lovely ghost of a cottonwood tree in my pasture, you have brought forth its thoughts quite well...often it is the harbored home of many a bird, even in death, it lifts life... Well well done, my friend...you have a Muse at your elbow...treat her kind, and kiss her for me... |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Karilea, Many many thanks for your extremely kind words... and yes I will keep my Muse humoured and in good health... regards, sudhir |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Sudhir, your poetry speaks fluently with much metaphor, my friend. This is, indeed, a lovely piece of writing. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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susanbartee Member
since 2000-08-15
Posts 119Channelview, TX USA |
Such wonderful imagination. I can just see it now. I think it was absolutely great. |
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JnR4eva Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 377Bronx, NY |
i dont know how i let this one pass me by but i must say this is beautiful...the imagery and the rhymes...and the subtle nature of this poor tree...longing only for a bit of love..how sad...how very sad  yet how common it is for those who are hurt to internally cry for help, yet don't receive it...how sad..thank you for letting me ramble lol "my love is my motivation my love is my inspiration perception of this poem is your interpretation" -- me |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Claire, honoured, I am to read your words, my friend... thanks susan, Thank for coming by, reading and responding... JnR4Eva, thanks for reading and responding... My regards, sudhir |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh Sudhir ... this will become one of my favorites of yours! It's difficult to express how this one touched me, without sounding a bit odd ... so I'll simply say I hear the voices of nature when she cries. Well done Sudhir! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Sudhir, Sudhir beloved one, the imagery of death comforting the living and the living taking shelter from the dead is superb. Be well Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Kit, I understand exactly what you say... Thanks a great deal, my friend... thanks O Kethry, I am so glad that you did find something in there... Heart-felt Thanks... still giggling on the beloved...  regards, sudhir |
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