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Wilfred Yeats
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0 posted 2000-08-23 11:14 PM



I set to write poetic words
Upon this page today
To pen some thoughts to raise the soul
Demons from my mind to flay

Yet quill would not my bidding keep
Nor would it find repose
Off in untold directions went
To write another's prose

Another's no, but sure my own
Yet not my conscious wish
As if I set to make soufflé
And cooked another dish

I sought to write heroic words
At least of high romance
Or maybe words in thoughtful nein
Or lively words that dance

So I stop scribing to ponder
Cause for dilemma's horns
One sharp thought filled brain with wonder
Thought vice life creates the thorns

Thought and life they're poles asunder
We dream things no fate allows
Thus do things, so good souls blunder
Striving schemes fate under ploughs

Yet I would strive night and day to
Win your heart with all my might
Fate be dammed I'd give my life to
Be your lover day and night

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Paula Finn
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1 posted 2000-08-24 11:18 AM


Your mind truly is wandering...but I like the path it led me down
Sunnyone
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2 posted 2000-08-24 11:38 AM



Sometimes the abstract meanderings are the most beautiful pieces of all, as this one! It has a free flow that I enjoy very much!!


Today is a gift....
That is why they call it
'the Present'!



catalinamoon
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3 posted 2000-08-24 11:52 AM


Will, this is priceless, I know just the feeling. The very end:
"Yet I would strive night and day to
Win your heart with all my might
Fate be dammed I'd give my life to
Be your lover day and night"

Seems to be about a particular love, as compared to writing in general. And what an excellent way to state it! Fate be damned! I love it!
catalinamoon


Sunshine
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4 posted 2000-08-24 12:21 PM


Well by gosh, if you can do it "day and dight" I'd like to see it! LOL!  Hugs...
Wilfred Yeats
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5 posted 2000-08-24 01:13 PM


oops - typo = 'nein' should be 'mien'

Paula - I wrote a couple verses - in that format and it felt good- then had to decide where to 'go' with it.~G~ - fate decreed an ending I could live with - else I'd still be writing Thank you  

Sunny1 - Life and thought (dreams) ARE poles apart - at least most of the time. - still it was a 'fun' write to see how I could draw it together  

CatalinaMoon - "Yes fate be dammed - go to go for it.   Thanks

Sunshine - I think it is a given that work and sleep  would have to be allowed some time -~G~ thank you



Martie
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6 posted 2000-08-25 06:40 PM


Dreams are part of reality, are they not...or what's night for...loved your poem, Bill.
Wilfred Yeats
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7 posted 2000-08-25 08:59 PM


Martie -

Yes - but I must tell you some of my dreams are ... well - that's for another forum ~G~
Thank you



Meadowmuse
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8 posted 2000-08-25 11:11 PM


"As if I set to make soufflé
And cooked another dish"

What a clever quill yours must be, to allow a gifting of this kind.  Thank you  

I enjoyed this very much, Wilfred.

~ Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau


bsquirrel
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9 posted 2000-08-25 11:45 PM


W.Y.,
Writer's block should always be this fun!

Mike

Wilfred Yeats
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10 posted 2000-08-26 11:14 AM


Claire-

Written with a ballpen - while away from PC at the shore- (no real quill   ) perhaps I should stay away from PC more   .
Humble thanks.

Mike -
the muse seldom guides me this well - glad you liked



Kit McCallum
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11 posted 2000-08-26 12:51 PM


I followed your thoughts like they were my own Wilfred! How many times I've sat to write purposefully on one topic, yet wound up down a different direction. It's exciting to let the muse run freely! Wonderful writing!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

Wilfred Yeats
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12 posted 2000-08-25 05:25 PM


To read the words you posted - floated me a few feet off the floor - to know that someone else shared my thoughts - really made me feel good - thank you - be blessed


Jenn E
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13 posted 2000-08-25 05:27 PM


I know I would'nt want to be without my dreams. OK, got me intrested in the those dreams of yours that "are" LOL......"We dream things no fate allows" was my favorite line. If you know a trick about making dreams a reality, plese let me know.....LOL....Great read.
Jenn E

Wilfred Yeats
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14 posted 2000-08-25 05:38 PM


Jenn -

I know no tricks - just determination and patience - I don't always succeed - but - then some dreams are not all they seem either - so I guess it's a wash     thanks for the reply - as for some dreams - check me out in adult - I post there too  



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