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Flushed Away ....Rebel Chall
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Flushed Away ....Rebel Chall |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA 
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*tried my hand at it..am not a gambler..always lose..and so it shows... Flushed Away He spun that wheel and I was it The one he chose 'mong all others A playboy bunny, could ante up But he chose my shyness, he would druther. Naiveté, virginity, The sweetest prize, this ace of spades Then showed me off, his queen of hearts Within a year, his wife, had made. This wheel of chance, he'd spin around And every time, a card would land He'd kiss me once and then again Inside my heart, he'd dance this hand. Sometimes he'd have a royal flush With me along, the crimson rose Contented, we, two hearts as one Spreading joy and love that glows. Then one day a house of full Became his only place to rest Passed me by, would rather fold Then try his hand, I must confess. I bet on nothing, I never lose I hate the game of life when played As chances, hoping for a win Except this time, my hand is laid Open now for all to see Betting, somehow's lost it's edge. This Queen of hearts had tried to save But winds have changed and blown his pledge. *sorry the more I tried the wearier I got M [This message has been edited by MMoonchild (edited 08-24-2000).] |
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susanbartee Member
since 2000-08-15
Posts 119Channelview, TX USA |
You did a fantastic job. Hope to someday be able to write as beautiful as you. Loved it. |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
A foolish man who doesn't play to win the hand that matters most. My compliments on a fine effort. Peace! |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
And you say you can't gamble. You bluffed and lost on this one, but you could have bluffed and won! Lovely sensitive caring poem. Be well Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
Ah the Life of a gambler....he played once too many times. Sad. Robert if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming. |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
susan well I tried anyway.....for those who don't understand I was asked for a divorce on the 18th after 30 years of marriage this month and standing by him these last several years of promises to stop his drinking....so the years before were wonderful and the last weekend a nightmare...completely unexpected... I have yet to feel..what I will eventually...so to write this was a bit confusing..a gamble, I actually lost and several years in the process of hoping and caring...and aging that I shall never get back ~~M |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
Andrew what a nice response, thank you ~~softly Maureen |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
Kethry...no he was the one bluffing and eventually was called on it by my actions, I guess...I still say his loss and the grass is not always greener on the other side....it still needs mowing and tender loving care... ~~softly Maureen |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
mmoon... thanks for rising to the challenge..  sorry yours was a bittersweet game though... no words of wisdom here from me....I just know that it hurts |
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English Rose Member
since 2000-08-20
Posts 211Berkshire, England |
Here's hoping life deals a better hand Mmoon, |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Well done, my friend...and yes the grass does need love, care and kindness...even on the other side. jwesley |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
Local Rebel thank you, I always enjoy a challenge..just I am not good at gambling..I sort of go for the sure thing..less hurt and loss that way ~~soft smiles Maureen |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Well done with the challenge, but sorry to learn that you lost the bet... but then look at the brighter side... you still have yourself to deal another round and what goes round comes around... things will become happier and better, I am sure... Cheers, regards, sudhir |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
English Rose thank you But OHHHHH do those odds keep going against me... ~~~sighing Maureen |
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