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Corazon
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since 2000-02-02
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0 posted 2000-08-23 09:16 AM



I guess if you
can live
with the lies
then I can turn
the sneer of my
disrespect up
side down for now
but it is a dangerous
game we play
neither of us are
bluffing
and the ante
is the breath
we breathe



[This message has been edited by Corazon (edited 08-23-2000).]

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Local Rebel
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1 posted 2000-08-23 10:24 AM


woah!  luvit.. a little chilly in here.... that's coooolld baby...!!

great poem!!

ladysixstring
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since 2000-07-27
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2 posted 2000-08-23 10:53 AM


Very to the point... great line... "and the ante is the breath we breathe"  Harsh!!!

-jaimie

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Sudhir Iyer
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since 2000-04-26
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3 posted 2000-08-23 10:55 AM


GREAT work....

simply love reading your works...

regards to you Corazon,
sudhir

doreen peri
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since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812
Virginia
4 posted 2000-08-23 10:59 AM


OUCH!
this one stings hard!!!... geesh, girl! you have a way with some very strong words... and, as always, you do it with a style i absolutely LOVE!

"then I can turn
the sneer of my
disrespect up
side down for now
but it is a dangerous
game we play"

great lines here... all of it... i wish i could write so MUCH in so few lines...this one is a winner!   as always, thanks for a great read
(oh, btw, putting "up" on one line and "side" on the next was very effective...)

Corazon
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since 2000-02-02
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5 posted 2000-08-23 02:14 PM


thanks guys, you know I hate the fact that this coldness lives, but I am blessed to be able to turn it into a poem and thus purge it.....thank you for reading and responding  
Balladeer
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6 posted 2000-08-23 10:40 PM


Ouch! Sounds like the stakes are the ones that go through the heart! Good work, Corazony one....
Corazon
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7 posted 2000-08-24 09:25 AM


thanks bal, and yep I like the way you put that.....
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