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serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738


0 posted 2000-08-23 03:50 AM


Take it then.
This stupid heart.
Take these words.
They only hurt.
Make me act with sense for once.
A shaman to remove this curse.

I do not want to love again.
Do not touch,
don't call me friend.
Lead me to a mountain cave,
where sins of love can be forgave.

A Priestess then,
whose only lust
is but become
the sparkle dust
to glitter in eternity--
Forget me love,
and turn from me...
I tire of hope
and the demise
transforming joy
to tired lies...

O Love, the master
of disguise,
is but a thief,
robs tears from eyes.

There is no answer--
question why.
I do not weep.
This well is dry.

So go then.
Turn your back to me.
Steal your brine
from depth of sea...
If loveless
I am meant to be,
leave but the heart
he gave to me...
a memoir of the days of old...
a lesson learned to love the cold.

© Copyright 2000 serenity blaze - All Rights Reserved
EagleOne
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since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829
Between a laugh and a tear...
1 posted 2000-08-23 03:57 AM


It is hard to put to words the feelings this has brought back to me. Excellent writing serenity!

"The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest"
~ My Angel.

Dee
Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330
Queensland, Australia
2 posted 2000-08-23 04:59 AM


serenity, this is so beautiful. I'm sure many of us have felt this way at some time. It's good to see the feelings put into words for us all.
Dee

Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium
3 posted 2000-08-23 05:05 AM




S E R E N I T Y
H
I N
N         S
E         H
S E V E R A L
      F   D
      F   E
      E   S U B L I M E
      R
    E V O K I N G
      E               E
      S U P E R B     M
      C               O
    H E A R T - F E L T
      N               I
      T               O
      L               N
      Y               S H I N E


regards,
sudhir

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
4 posted 2000-08-23 05:15 AM


"Take it then
this stupid heart."
I feel like this all the time.
I feel like the women I care for don't appreciate my sincerity.
What value has a heart if no one wants to accept it or share it...James

spiked
Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873
Hammond, La USA
5 posted 2000-08-23 07:28 PM


Love is a funny emotion we cannot really guide it and it does as it pleases you have captured the essence of this. Well done
Rich

catalinamoon
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone
6 posted 2000-08-23 07:37 PM


Serenity, the poem is superb, and I know the feeling, wish I did not relate to this quite so much. Thanks for writing my thoughts for me.  
catalinamoon

JnR4eva
Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 377
Bronx, NY
7 posted 2000-08-23 08:17 PM


such deep emotions, mixed
with feelings that transcend
of words undescribable
is the poem which thee has penned

wonderful serenity ..sad but beautifully put


"my love is my motivation
my love is my inspiration
perception of this poem
is your interpretation"
-- me



Meadowmuse
Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263

8 posted 2000-08-23 08:25 PM


"Forget me love,
and turn from me...
I tire of hope
and the demise
transforming joy
to tired lies..."

You've spoken from your heart to my own with this candid piece of writing, serenity, and I cannot thank you enough. Remarkable how you have put it so well to written word. Thank you.

~ Claire


Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau


Lone Wolf
Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA
9 posted 2000-08-23 09:09 PM


Serenity,

This was awesome.  I feel your power all the way over here!!  I relate all too well to how this feels when one walks out the door, but sometimes the hurt is not worth a few moments of joy.  **Sigh** Wonderful writing here my friend.  Well said.  

Lone Wolf



Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

10 posted 2000-08-23 09:27 PM


Take it then.
This stupid heart.
Take these words.
They only hurt.
Make me act with sense for once.
A shaman to remove this curse.

I do not want to love again.
Do not touch,


A Priestess then,
whose only lust
is but become
the sparkle dust
to glitter in eternity--
Forget me love,
and turn from me...
I tire of hope
and the demise
transforming joy
to tired lies...
====================
If loveless
I am meant to be,
leave but the heart
he gave to me...
a memoir of the days of old...
a lesson learned to love the cold.
======================

oh my baby girl...
i know i know i know

>>"Make me act with sense for once.
A shaman to remove this curse."<<

uuummmmmmmm ...
can we get a buy 1-get one free on this curse removal??
and as for acting with sense ...
how would we know ...
would we even recognize it...
you know..that I know...yadda yadda..
need I tell you this poem rocks me sweet..
your purge divine in ryhme my poetess Goddess...
Goddess SJ   (hehe)
have you ever heard the song..
Sweet Jane...by the Cowboy Junkies
its one of me all time favs...
me think me needs to sing it to ya...
feel better baby..i am some .. OK..
no worries..K??
makes us get wrinkles and gray hair..
YOU KNOW...
*winkie winkie*
love you girl
me

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

11 posted 2000-08-23 11:44 PM


I am running out words to say thank you...you make me smile, each of you...with a bow, a curtsey and a hand over heart...
much love and hugs...

Mike
Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462

12 posted 2000-08-24 12:38 PM


enjoyed your poem...  very nicely written.
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