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Unhappily Married
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Unhappily Married |
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oh2beme Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 215NV USA 
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To this man I vowed, "Till death do us part", I gave him my soul, I gave him my heart. Do as you wish, but please be kind, For a woman like this isn't easy to find. Just as I thought things were going my way, Very few words did he have to say. With that piece of paper, it all disappeared, These mishaps occurring were what I had feared. Grasping at straws, trying at best, Failing in sorrow now I confessed. This marriage was over long before, For the wife he loved, he didn't adore. Never attention, not a spark would arise, He looked at me with no gleam in his eyes. Try as I might, I couldn't go on, It was time to face up, the love was gone. And as I was leaving, I took one last look, A chapter was closing of this short-lived book. So, grasping at straws and trying at best, Failing in sorrow I now confessed. |
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ladysixstring Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 374 |
Sad... "And as I was leaving, I took one last look, A chapter was closing of this short-lived book." Nice visual!! -jaimie Website: www.ladysixstring.com |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Your poem speaks of your pain...but shows your strength in leaving, A heart felt piece, great writing~ |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
This is so sad...I feel for you. |
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Auguste 
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Such terrible sadness here...painfully well written. Michael |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
It takes love to make a marriage work, that's for sure. A one way relationship can only last so long. Very well expressed. Denise |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Beautifully expressed Oh2beme! This poem has such a lovely flow woven through the tender and sorrowful words you've written here. Very nicely penned!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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sonjes Senior Member
since 2000-02-18
Posts 564North Carolina |
another poem mired deep in sadness...yet with a twinkle of hope that strength can carry through...your words touched my soul. Don't care what people say Just follow your own way Don't give up and use the chance To return to innocence. -Enigma |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
The sorrows of life are what give us our strength as we go forward. Beautiful write and full of power and heart. |
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Brandyn Sand Member
since 2000-04-21
Posts 82Columbia, SC |
I went thru something similar. Tried for over a decade to make things work, but alas my efforts were a waste of time. All one-sided, ya know? I feel for you, yet I know from experience that writing how you feel is a wonderful means of working thru the pain. Keep it up. *hugs* Sand |
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oh2beme Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 215NV USA |
Thank you to all who have read and replied. Pain it was but, Never have I been so Happy! One of those lessons in life ya know? I will be posting a sequil soon so be on the look out for the happier side of life! Hugs and Kisses to all, Debbie |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
O2Bme .. this one clutches the heart and as the next chapter unfolds there is promise for new beginnings .. can't wait to read the sequel Coco |
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JnR4eva Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 377Bronx, NY |
ohhh oh2beme..i truly do hope that this isn't about you in any way..if it is i send you my deepest wishes...the poem was beautifuly written yet heart breaking  "my love is my motivation my love is my inspiration perception of this poem is your interpretation" -- rlt |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
Wow this is an excellent piece...the title caught my eye.....as i was that for quite a few years...but thank god not too many..great writing... Julie :) |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Nice description of my life. How did you know?? Very thoughtful and well written poem. Glad you are happier now. catalinamoon |
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