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Corinne
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0 posted 2000-08-22 06:05 PM



Lake Tahoe

Up here where the air is thin
Just a hint of fall in August
Past towns so aptly named
Dodge the gambling crowds,
Beer swilling outdoorsmen
To sliver a path through vanilla pines
Permit your senses to slowly receive
For the colors will defy description,
The artist cannot quite call it cerulean,
The poet will not cleverly compare it
But perhaps the child understands
When he says it’s an upside down sky.

A million fire opals eye to eye,
Colors you feel when you die
Words just slip and slide on by
Fading like an upside down sky.

© 200 Corinne Bailey

© Copyright 2000 Corinne - All Rights Reserved
Mark Bohannan
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1 posted 2000-08-22 07:37 PM


I have been there and you have hit on it perfectly....it is so beautiful there that it almost defies description at all.  You see with the visions eye.  well done...simply beautiful.
Alle'cram
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2 posted 2000-08-22 07:37 PM


Corrine, Beautiful visual and wonderfully written. A place I would like to visit!
Sounds heavenly. Love, Marcy

"A million fire opals eye to eye,
Colors you feel when you die"

Bill Charles
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3 posted 2000-08-22 07:50 PM


Hi Corinne,
A real beauty you have penned. As always, you have a great way with words from within.

Parker
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4 posted 2000-08-22 09:22 PM


Hi sweet poet, this almost sounds like a song. or just me. I think everything is a song these days. Wheres that damn guitar...  

Park

Corinne
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5 posted 2000-08-22 09:44 PM


Thank you Mark, spend the 30 minutes it takes to drive from north to south around the lake trying to come up with something to describe it, the only line I retained was "a million fire opals eye to eye."

Allacram, thank you, yes, it is one of a kind, you should see it!

Thank you, Bill!

Park, Park, Park, how've you been my friend?  Yes, the last part is kind of a song! Thank you!

Corinne

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6 posted 2000-08-22 09:55 PM


Well, I've never seen it....until now. Thanks for a beautiful view  
Denise
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7 posted 2000-08-22 10:34 PM


Absolutely beautiful, Corinne! Lovely view!

Denise

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8 posted 2000-08-23 07:37 AM


Corinne~
Your phrases brought the scene to life.
It is beautiful indeed.
~*Marge*~


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Sudhir Iyer
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9 posted 2000-08-23 07:51 AM


Corinne...
This is the purest of the pure magic of imagery here... with great vividity, you have described in the most minimally required words... something I would crave to emulate myself....

WONDERFUL
"gambling crowds", "an upside down sky",
"million fire opals eye to eye" amongst the most striking...
I could die to write such wonderful lines...

regards to a marvelous poet...
sudhir

RAM
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10 posted 2000-08-23 10:32 AM


you've captured it perfectly, Core.  I can't wait to see the lake again...maybe even take a wrong turn somewhere.

Rick

Corinne
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11 posted 2000-08-23 11:25 AM


Thanks so much, Balladeer, Denise, Marge!

Sudhir, kinder words I've never heard, thank you!

RAM, thank you, kind sir, perhaps you mean a "right" turn???  LOL

Corinne

RAM
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12 posted 2000-08-23 11:32 AM


yes, I stand corrected   LOL

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