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jwesley
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

0 posted 2000-08-22 04:58 PM


Heads Was My Heart

As I flipped the coin
and watched it fly
sparkling,
glinting,
catching the light
as over and over
it turned,
I thought of my ante
in this game of chance,
where heads was love
and I'd stay with you;
tails was tears,
'cause our love fell thru,
and I wished it'd never come down.

But down it came,
with terrible speed,
to crash on the floor,
bounce up and down,
twirl and turn,
roll in a wobbly
curving way,
then finally settle down.

I looked at it through
tightly squinted eyes,
afraid it would say
to say my goodbyes,
but finally I looked
my god, it was heads…
yes it was heads,
because I love you,
heads was my heart,
and on the other side too.

w. james beard, jr.



[This message has been edited by jwesley (edited 08-22-2000).]

© Copyright 2000 Wesley James Beard, Jr. - All Rights Reserved
ladysixstring
Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 374

1 posted 2000-08-22 05:06 PM


Fantastic description here... "where heads was love and I'd stay with you; tails was tears, 'cause our love fell thru,"  Enjoyed this very much!!

-jaimie

Website: www.ladysixstring.com

ggrn3
Member
since 2000-08-17
Posts 433
Nahunta Georgia U.S.
2 posted 2000-08-22 05:32 PM


JWesley
  I really enjoyed this one. I too liked the same verse as ladysixstring.  Although the last line made me think you were flipping a two headed coin (LOL)  
  Great poem

Garfield

ethome
Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
3 posted 2000-08-22 06:10 PM


Great write jw I like the ending very much because you created some wonderful anticipation on the way.
Mark Bohannan
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song
4 posted 2000-08-22 07:34 PM


Yes...I would have to agree.  you met the challenge well....I am with ethome in that the ending was great.  well done.
Local Rebel
Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767
Southern Abstentia
5 posted 2000-08-22 10:03 PM


well -- think you get the prize for most original game...

never would have thought of flipping a coin..

so well penned too!!


Kethry
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
6 posted 2000-08-23 08:11 AM


This poem was a winner. But in Australia the ending was predictable because we play "two-up" Heads/ Heads. Win/win.  
Be well
Kethry

"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-

juliet_2u
Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 1125
North Carolina
7 posted 2000-08-23 10:26 AM


Great job here.
Juls

jwesley
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563
Spring, Texas
8 posted 2000-08-23 12:15 PM


WOW! Finally figured out why I was losing my ability to REPLY and EDIT here. So...thanks to all that have read and commented. Appreciate it much.  

Glad to hear the two-headed coin aspect came through...was concerned about that.  

If've I missed reading/commenting to any of your post on this challenge...slap me with an email...I've really enjoyed all I've read and want to read them all.


jwesley

Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium
9 posted 2000-08-23 12:19 PM


WOW that was most creative and very well written...

great work...

regards,
sudhir

jwesley
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563
Spring, Texas
10 posted 2000-08-23 02:36 PM


Thank you, my friend, I really enjoyed your challenge response too.

jwesley

MMoonchild
Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715
PA
11 posted 2000-08-23 05:25 PM


Made me smile..love nice endings like that
almost a fairy tale flip
~~softly
Maureen

Paula Finn
Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546
missouri
12 posted 2000-08-26 01:25 AM


Well done...I really enjoyed the idea of flipping a coin, heads I win tails you lose
CocoBaci
Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043

13 posted 2000-08-26 01:33 AM


Very nicely done!  I too was capitvated by the suspense throughout the imagery you've described in the toss of coin..

Coco  

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