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ethome
Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

0 posted 2000-08-21 03:24 PM


This is a result of comments WhtDove and I made in a certain situation and this is my input that agrees with hers.

Her brother's wife
his sisters spouse
another stunning story's out.
Another weekend
for loving treason
and chasing moon beams

Another night
another room
another story set to bloom
Another reason
for pleasure seeking
and chasing moon beams

Those old folk tales
where love never fails
have gone astray from the story line
While some remain
most have changed
but just the future for a time.

Another beginning
another test
another cosy lover's nest
another new love
is it a true love
who's chasing moon beams.

He's got big plans
she's got hers too
another perfect couple two
It's time to move up
and use that new love
chasing moon beams

He's late at work
she's home disturbed
another night alone for her
She's lost and hurt now
he's leaving her out
he's chasing moon beams

The mood retires
the moonlight lifts
another tired night to wish
another small small prize
a lonely compromise
left chasing moon beams.

[This message has been edited by ethome (edited 08-21-2000).]

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LngJhnAg
Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508
Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion
1 posted 2000-08-21 03:30 PM


Welllll, ET - I guess that ol' work ethic can really stir things up, eh?  You worte this poem so well.  I sensed the needfulness and expectation for something new, anything new, just as long as its new.  Great job!  I enjoyed it completely.
Mark Bohannan
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song
2 posted 2000-08-21 04:15 PM


Very nicely put.  You shine in your works as you touch on delicate matters as well as heartwrenching ones.  You are a pure talent for these eyes to rest.  Thank you for sharing so well.
JulieAnn
Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754
Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!!
3 posted 2000-08-21 04:20 PM


Wow you have written this perfectly.....always wanting that excitement of something new...am I right??..i hope this was the point you were trying to get across forgive me please if I am wrong.... Great writing...

Julie :)



ethome
Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
4 posted 2000-08-21 04:38 PM


Well guys...Julie Mark and John that's not exactly (but yes it is too) what I had in mind although I know that type of thinking permeates the minds of the world now as a new culture starts to develop again. What I had in mind was that the grass is not greener on the other side of the symbolical mountain and that if you leave a long term relationship that things are never the same. It becomes a new set of standards to adjust to and there is always a new set of problems to cope with.
I know how these things go and some of the maturity gained over the years is used to cope with yourself so now you have to remit it to a new relationship and how does it work??
Do I make any sense...please help me WhtDove you are in my corner!!

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