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Haikus---a collection
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Haikus---a collection |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song 
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New Rose dew filled petals sing with morning kisses of love as new rose blossoms Raccoon radiant eyes dance upon moonlit quivers gold raccoon is prowling Waterfall cascading waters of thunderous roar flowing spiraling in mass Dolphins dancing fins of grey breaching depths of ocean respite in dolphin delight Butterfly kisses butterfly kisses upon nectar given grace dances wildly on Mark Bohannan If there is a certain one that just stands out to you or if one just grabs you, please let me know. It will help me to learn and to grow. Thanks much. [This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (edited 08-21-2000).] |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Well Mark I have to say you have certainly become very good at this style.. I like the variety here...all are very well done!! |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Hey, Mark - These are all very very good, but how about a Kitten Haiku? I can lend you lots of ideas *veg* - I like all these Haikus - they are really well thought. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Mark these are great....very cool the imagery is strong and has that impact love the dolphin one..very cool.. and of course the butterfly one... did i ever tell ya about the butterfly that dances when i.... ahhhh ... eeerrr....NEVERMIND hahaha   later Haiku-poet-gator me |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
May I grab them all? The sun is certainly smiling down on a lot of happiness here... |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
ethome----thank you so much...now when are you going to indulge? LJ- purring kitty sweet marking territory upon Long Johns smelly feet how is that LJ...ROFL JM-you mean the one when you are on hands and knees....?????? yes you told me..LOLOLOL karilea-yes you may....why would you ask? This is self serv here....go for it. [This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (edited 08-21-2000).] |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
nice coos mark... hard to write... but well done by a haikurian... |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
poet sips words feels the breath of voice writes a song oh yes, these are nice! |
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juliet_2u Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 1125North Carolina |
Well just look at you go! Very nice my friend, very nice indeed. Loved them all. Juls |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Mark, these are all terrific! loved them all  Well Done! |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MarkB~ See what staying after class did for you ! Everything you do amazes me, Cowboy ! Pretty gosh-darned clever ..... I think they call it 'sand-bagging' ! I personally like the Racoon ... sort of suits your bandit nature ! LOL ! Love ya' for your gusto ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Mark, I love all of these. But if you look at the original haikus on the web, they usually have a break or twist, usually at the beginning of the third line, and "Racoon" does exactly that. Maybe I'm wrong on this, but I think thats what they say about Japanese Haiku. But there are many forms,These are all very lovely indeed :iz |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Mark* These are all great...a favorite...hmmmmmm the rose and the butterfly...and the waterfall.....oh and the dolphins...great work!!! Oops..almost forgot..the racoons too ..guess that's all of em!! |
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cathybohannan Member
since 2000-07-31
Posts 140Paintsville,KY |
I"m back!!from D.C., hey there brother,you know I like them all,but the one the best is New Rose. Love you, your sister,Cathy Cathy Marie Bohannan |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Local Rebel-they are actually not too hard once you get the hang of it and that only takes one line. Thank you much. Martie-you are so sweet. juls-thank you so much....it is fun isnt it? Dark Angel-I am glad to hear you say that. Thanks so much. Marge-Raccoon is my 2nd middle name...how did you know? thanks for the push> Liz---thank you so much for all that....I guess I shouldn't have skipped class that day.LOLOL Holly-do you bottle all of that innocense wrapped in sweetness....and if so...where do I get some.  ..Thank you so much my dear friend.Cathy-glad to see you back....how was DC...oh never mind I will just call you hon" Thank you for picking my rose. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Mark loved your Haiku's but I'm cross that you beat me to kitten reply to Long John. I would have written kitten for your birth ferocious, bundle of fur will leak on carpet Be well Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Hey Mark... that's like eat a pizza and then buy the whole pizza factory ... LOL ... Haiku has really got to you... and you have got to Haiku as well... Given a choice, you very well know I will choose the waterfall... but give me another and I will choose them all... before you find out they will be gone... all so wonderfully done... regards, sudhir |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Kethry-I think you just did.lol....As long as you are in line then of course there is room to wet on him....doesnt matter if you are first or not. thank you. Sudhir-I have quite a large appetite and it is cheaper to own the place than to simply buy a few stocks.lol.......thank you for your kindness. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Lovely work! Think, my fave here is the Racoon one because I was taught the traditional Haiku, where there is a surprise in the last line. Corinne |
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ggrn3 Member
since 2000-08-17
Posts 433Nahunta Georgia U.S. |
Mark I liked them all as did everyone else who responded. I especially liked the ones about the "Waterfall" & "Dolphins." Garfield |
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ladysixstring Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 374 |
I'd say Raccoon would be my pick. Though, I do like them all. -jaimie Website: www.ladysixstring.com |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
Ok, you know I love all you write, yadda, yadda, yadda, I have said this before I am sure. LOL These are hard to write, I know beacuse of late I have been trying. My FAV is butterfly kisses.......You know, that is pretty cruel asking us to pick a fav, as they are all good.....The racoon one was great also. Jenn E |
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