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The Surgeon

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LngJhnAg
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0 posted 08-21-2000 02:53 PM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for LngJhnAg

The surgeon wrote in dashing terms that swept one's breath away,
Writing flowing similes, always knowing what to say.
He loosed his romantic arrows and they always hit their mark,
Leaving dew upon each lady's lip, and longing in her heart.

He wrote of beauty and devotion, of neverending need,
And faithfulness to each as true as any heart could bleed.
And with each line he scripted there with his surgeon's hand,
He wooed another lonely woman into his promised land.

He was a vicarious lover, for he was always virtually there,
Generous to a fault with whomever he could share.
Lending words of comfort, making promises he couldn't keep,
Hurting her more than ever before; because she'd fallen deep.

With each new heart that pledged itself to give love another chance,
He quickly took up the passionate rhythm and joined her in their dance.
She'd forget the pain that tore at her and pour out her very soul,
To the surgeon with healing words that were meant but to console.

But as each fell even deeper in love and he realized what he'd done,
He'd find himself trapped again by what they had become.
He, the surgeon, prescribing words to make her feel whole again,
She, the broken, in more pain from his thoughtless pen.

He thought the words, "I love you," could mend her broken heart,
And ease the woman through her pain to help her life restart.
He thought he could remain aloof while healing with his words,
All the pain and loneliness from the anguished cries he heard.

The need to help the helpless woman runs deep within man's genes,
Protecting her an overpowering end that justifies the means.
But what many men don't realize is that the cure can be the disease,
That mortally inflicts pain with words meant to soothe and please.

So, select your words carefully all you men with gifted pen,
Don't let your edge cut out the heart with careless misintent.
For where your scalpel means to heal, every word may leave a scar,
And thereby kill the dreams she holds within her tender heart.



[This message has been edited by LngJhnAg (edited 08-22-2000).]
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ethome
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1 posted 08-21-2000 03:00 PM       View Profile for ethome   Email ethome   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit ethome's Home Page   View IP for ethome

Truth all the way through that's what this poem is made of and it's a great read... and to turn the corner it can apply to women too, it's not necessarily a man thing...be careful how you throw your words around if you don't mean them right from the heart...wonderful poem I really enjoyed it to the fullest.
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2 posted 08-21-2000 03:07 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Twouldn't be thee, Jack the Ripper!
Ah surgeon, lift thy scalpel from my throat, for I'm caught up in all you wrote,
my heart bleeds your blood of ink
I'm more in like with you, than e'en you think!

[I think I'm caught up in my Quinella series, but gave you a read, and a thumbs up, as a breather...]
passing shadows
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silveryone, you certainly have impressed me much over and over again...this one is icing. You have come so far, I'm glad I'm still here to watch you grow. God speed.
Local Rebel
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4 posted 08-21-2000 04:24 PM       View Profile for Local Rebel   Email Local Rebel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Local Rebel

well mike...you've outdone us all with this one ye Bard ye...  
T McCoy
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5 posted 08-21-2000 04:28 PM       View Profile for T McCoy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for T McCoy

very cool!!  "prescibing words"...wow
that's great...

Tony
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6 posted 08-21-2000 06:08 PM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corazon

had this thought, but couldn't have written it so smoothly.....very nice writing  
Martie
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Long John--this is fabulous...how easily swayed by words are those who write words themselves...How well you have spoken this truth, the danger of a poet falling in love with a poem.  
jwesley
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Aye, long john....true words, but men need to remember, women are surgeons too (hee hee).

jwesley
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I've been on this side
of surgeon's silver knife
that's why I hide my heart
from the 'cutting side of life'


excellent poem sir!  
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10 posted 08-21-2000 09:52 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Dr.LongJohn~
I've heard reports of your scalpel, sir ....
Please report to surgery !

STAT ! !  

You are something else, my friend.
What a wonderful write !

~*Marge*~


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LngJhnAg
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Thank you one and all - I wrote this poem from personal experience - It took much inflicted pain for me to learn that there are some things a person must live through on her own, and words meant to ease pain can often cause even deeper pain.  I wish I could say I had been on the receiving end of this lesson, then I could feel better about events in my now distant past.

I hope those who haven't learned the lesson of this poem heed my words well.  Sweet words intended to ease another's pain can make her heart break even worse when the words do not have real commitment as their foundation.
Elizabeth Santos
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12 posted 08-22-2000 08:37 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Yes, I agree, there are women surgeons out there also. I try to stay away from scalpels. I once had foot surgery (male doctor) and it hasn't healed yet. Do you think I'd let one of those things close to my heart? This was a great ppoem and a great message
Liz
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What cutting words you write Long John and how they apply to everyone. Well done
Kethry

"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-
LngJhnAg
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14 posted 08-22-2000 10:48 AM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LngJhnAg

Liz - A surgeon cut your foot and it still hasn't healed?  Why am I not surprised?  After all, there are so many of us who throw ourselves at your feet that I'm sure they will never have time to heal!

Kethry - Thank you for your support.  I hope you've never been cut that way.
JamesMichael
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15 posted 08-22-2000 03:01 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Excellent writing..I enjoyed the message...James
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Impressive!!  Read it twice!!

-jaimie

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17 posted 08-22-2000 03:27 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

and here I thought sailors only wrote about sturgeons! I suppose that was when you shortened your name from LongJohn Silvertongue....

It's a great read and an excellent poem, Mike....I hate it when you get serious...makes me jealous  
Andrew Scott
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How true... how true.  I'm not saying that some men don't, but I do believe most women feel the written and spoken word much deeper than we.  Perhaps it is that whole hunter-gather, visual thing... that and think I've heard it said that we don't listen.  All in all... well written and well thought Sir Silver.  Peace!
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Wow!   Your writing just keeps getting better and better!  I know this guy! Know some women that are like this too, bringing stray CATS home to nuture, then sorry as hell when they get scratched, bitten and pissed on!  LOL

Beautiful, haunting poem, LgnJhn!

Corinne
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20 posted 01-30-2010 11:10 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

I chose the archive word of the day as "select"....

and this was one of them.

Write on!
 
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