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English Rose
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0 posted 2000-08-21 12:20 PM



I felt you walk into the room.
As I turned and saw you standing there
That first flamed flush began.

It started in youth,
Carrying my heart into a new way of life,
Watching the boy become man.

When you chose me
And I told God I would stand by you,
Did you tell Him what YOU wanted?

Was it the truth you vowed?
Or did you lie to Him the way you lie to me,
And take my love for granted!!



© Copyright 2000 Debbie Sanderson - All Rights Reserved
ethome
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1 posted 2000-08-21 12:31 PM


So true love does hurt...and when one of the partners is lying to the other it never works. Even though one may suffer the consequences the truth always works out for the better. Somewhere back in the depths of the mind the one that lies is always uncomfortable with that lie and it seems that this is the beginning of a process of deterioration of that person and their relationship. The way I see it anyway...this must be a great poem look how you've made me ramble on so...have a nice day..
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2 posted 2000-08-21 12:51 PM


Debbie,  I have to agree with ethome.  Lies squirm in the light because they can only thrive in darkness.  Love often hurts, but of that kind of pain I'd gladly endure.  Honesty is always best in any circumstance.

Great post, Deb!

Michael

JnR4eva
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3 posted 2000-08-21 01:29 PM


STRONG, forceful, simple, beautiful...oh don't mind me, just thinking out loud about this poem  

"my love is my motivation
my love is my inspiration
perception of this poem
is your interpretation"
-- me



American Princess
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since 2000-08-21
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4 posted 2000-08-21 07:34 PM


Deb,

I can feel your hurt in these lines. You deserve some happiness. So sad, but beautifully written..

Your friend,

American Princess

serenity blaze
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5 posted 2000-08-22 01:58 AM


Simply said, but eloquent.  Well done!
Irisheyes
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6 posted 2000-08-22 03:53 AM


I am new at this,but I understand where you are coming from.Nobody deserves pain like that.I wish the best for you.Beautiful post!

English Rose
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7 posted 2000-08-22 04:03 AM



Thank you to everyone who read this.....
I am sorry to say that it is NOT fiction but
hey.....that@s life I guess!!!


Sudhir Iyer
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since 2000-04-26
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8 posted 2000-08-22 11:28 AM


very painful... very bitter happening...

lovely words, very eloquent...

regards,
sudhir

sarahC
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since 2000-06-07
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9 posted 2000-08-22 01:52 PM


I really relate to this coming from another point of wiew though.....it sort of brought up guilty feelings...well not so much because of lies but oooo well..weird too because I have known my ex since child hood....anyway maybe I needed to read this...hmmm,,,great writng though...   < !signature-->

Just me




[This message has been edited by sarahC (edited 08-22-2000).]

Sunnyone
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since 2000-07-06
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Staffordshire, England
10 posted 2000-08-22 01:58 PM



Yes, it does hurt sometimes......that's how you know that it is true love. If it wasn't planted so deep in your heart, it wouldn't hurt so bad!  I hope that if it is you feeling this pain, that you won't become bitter......just know that love gives you many chances in life. You only need look.
           Great writing on this one!
      


Today is a gift....
That is why they call it
'the Present'!



JamesMichael
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11 posted 2000-08-22 03:04 PM


A very important lesson here...I once took a woman for granted and I have regretted it ever since...love someone when you have the opportunity or the consequences may be more than you wish to bare...James
English Rose
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12 posted 2000-08-22 03:48 PM



Gee thanks Sudhir....hope I didn't make you too sad!


English Rose
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13 posted 2000-08-22 04:47 PM




Whoops careful Sarah your guilty secrets are showing!!!!! Thanks for the mention

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