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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia 
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I need to thank Mark for this poem cause he gave me the challenge. Gave me the gold, gave me the crystal cabinet and gave me the idea. Thanks Mark. I have a crystal cabinet to keep my trophies in from days when challenge was well met with heart enough to win my trophies came from speaking from debate and argument why did I think the passive sports were such a big event and then I thought, I'm human we're set apart by reason what if awards for emotions grand how much gold would I, then breeze in my temperance a factor how rigidly I'd train if prizes now for character were gifted, to bear strain to live my life to fullness could I, would I, take the prize or practice daily coolness with gold medals in my eyes. could I win for anger directed carefully I think not, a ribbon only there for me could I, for love, win gold again the answer's no although, maybe a silver for hearts that loved me so could my pity, win the race and help me speed ahead or can I only match the pace, of lives held back by dread could I hold forth with anguish expound on passion deep to take the gold, could I withhold shoddy thoughts and sanity keep no not one, but all of these go up to claim the laurel I'll have gold beyond heartsease when no more wish to quarrel when reconciled with me I am and peace within my soul I hold see the wider, higher plan recognise the greater gold then my life is nearly done awards aplenty found from my friends and family gold, silver, gifts abound |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Hi Kethry..... If I were a judge, I would give you a gold medal for the Poetic Olympics!! This was absolutely terrific, and I did think the timing of the message went along well with what's happening Now!! Great writing here! Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Wonderfully said! regards, sudhir |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Wouldnt it be a wonderful world if we all held ourselves up to GOLD MEDAL standards? Next time I get angry I will think of this...thank you |
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JnR4eva Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 377Bronx, NY |
What an interesting concept kethry  I love to play sports and this is truly a thought for the mind to ponder on. Beautifully written "my love is my motivation my love is my inspiration perception of this poem is your interpretation" -- me |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Oh I like the originality of this...and the perfect form and thought...well done! How about a poetry prize for the mantel of your heart? |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
For this you get the torch to the next olympics to lite the fire and mark the beginning of your spirit. This was beautiful and I thank you. The challenge was put up to bring out all the muses that were so called in hiding. I wanted to fuel the fire in the ones that were the real competitors within themselves. You won all four and YOU are the first to let me know that you had your HEART in it. You competitive edge is what will bring you many rewards in REAL life and that is what I was searching for. Thank you and WELL done. Much spirit. |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
What a terrific metaphor you developed here! I love the comparisons. Its obvious you worked on this. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Love the title and the rest, well, it is so well written. I think you have answered the challenge admirably and you definitely deserve the gold......well done!! |
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