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T McCoy Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 186
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i woke up falling alone the little things they're kinda strange and i'm kinda choked headfirst and blind don't mind me don't mind my mind it's kinda strange yea but maybe that will change do you know what i know i never thought i'd ever change did you know who's to know you took control i'm rearranged yea you gave me new life and i'm feeling supersonic yea you gave me new life now my love is automatic i think you're what i always needed... i'm standing here top of a hill bounce off the clouds i think i will dive right in read your mind stare at the stars and jump through time it's kinda strange yea but maybe that could change do you know what i know i never thought i'd ever change did you know who's to know you took control i'm rearranged yea you gave me new life and i'm feeling supersonic yea you gave me new life and now my love is automatic i think you're what i always needed... i go to bed and try to drown in thoughts of you when you're not around i'm crowded alone inside my mind falling forward i jump through time it's kinda strange yea but maybe that could change do you know what i know i never thought i'd ever change did you know who's to know you took control i'm rearranged yea you gave me new life and i'm feeling supersonic yea you gave me new life now my love is automatic yea you're what i always needed... [This message has been edited by T McCoy (edited 08-22-2000).] |
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JnR4eva Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 377Bronx, NY |
WOW..nice form, beautifully written..I mean all I can say is...WOW  "my love is my motivation my love is my inspiration perception of this poem is your interpretation" -- me |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hi Tony I see you've penned another song poem here....I love a lot of the lines especially the "feeling supersonic" and "love is automatic." Good stuff I always love this format. |
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sarahC Member
since 2000-06-07
Posts 84Michigan |
Tony~~whoever this is for is a very lucky person..very nicely written I could easily hear it as a song, with a dedication to your love of course. |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
Many many great lines!... very lyrical... i can hear the song in my head... "dive right in read your mind stare at the stars and jump through time" LOVE this! will be looking forward to reading more of your work. thanks! ~ all you can really ever expect out of life is a good apology and some decent poetry ~ |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
YA!! I want to hear this one...so hurry up and hit the big time would ya  I really liked this one T cool stuff!! btw....my tuff guy can beat up your new tuff guy ANYTIME |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
yep I echo what others said already... wonderful writing... regards, sudhir |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Cmon Tony sing it to us!!!!!!!!!! Wonderful |
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T McCoy Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 186 |
JnR* WOW...thanks! ethome* thanks...it's always cool to know what part someone likes the most...cheers man sarah* well thank you... doreen* thankyou kindly... BDC* ...hmmm...as always your reply made me smile smile smile...and btw...yea right! Sudhir* thankyou so much Paula* y'know if this place supported voice messaging and i did that...well i'd probably crash everything thanks! thanks all!!!!!! Tony |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Hey, Mac - this really rocks - I can hear it in the pit now! Terrific flow and just enough disjointed to make it work superbly! |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Absolutely wonderful. Your "SONG" ...and it is that, is so full of thanks in a bonding of love. This would go down for true friends as well as new lovers and even lovers of a lifetime. Well written. |
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T McCoy Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 186 |
in the pit huh? COOL...i'll start growing a mohawk again... thanks Tony |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
How about a Red mowhawk Then you'd look "Tough" [This message has been edited by Butterflies_dont_cry (edited 08-22-2000).] |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Mr T, this is my first read of you, I think, well I can't trust my memory....what a waste of a mind..lol. anyway this rocks, I love the lyrical form. You be another Canuck possibly... Parker [This message has been edited by Haleyja (edited 08-22-2000).] |
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ggrn3 Member
since 2000-08-17
Posts 433Nahunta Georgia U.S. |
T.McCoy You say you can't sing, but you sure can write. Need an agent, I'm available (LOL) Your talent should be put to music, heard in a song. This one is  . Keep up the good work.Garfield |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Awesome! You've captured how love can rearrange a life very well. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"I think I will dive right in read your mind. Stare at the stars and jump thru time." Favorite lines of a very soothing and enjoyable poem..James |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
Hey There!!! I have been packing, moving, unpacking, adjusting........SO glad I am back on line. This is awsome, as is everything I have read from you. NOW, when you make it big, which you will, try to remember us little people would ya! lol You are truly gifted Tony. This song suits so many types of love, as Mark said, which is why I like it so much. PS Can I be in a video? LOL kidding! Smile, its all good!!! Jenn E |
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