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I Will Always Remember.....
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I Will Always Remember..... |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
I will always remember The day that we first met It was almost fifteen years ago In stone it was set The month was August Outside it was cold and wet I will always remember The look upon your face That first time our eyes met At our special place When it was time to go You left without a trace I will always remember How easily I gave my heart You knew it was only yours Right from the very start In your heart's depths I found the missing part I will always remember Us together that first time Under the moon and stars Together we reached our prime The love that we made Was nothing less than devine I will always remember The day that we were wed Then our passion glowed An intense dark red Visions of our future Swam in my head I will always remember The way things were Poetry you wrote for me Made my heart stir Your all encompassing love Was an amazing cure I will always remember The good times we shared I hope you know That I always cared I loved you more Than anyone ever dared I will always remember When you walked out the door A piece of my heart From the whole tore The pain that I felt Scarred me forevermore ---------------------------------------------------- Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Jenn, You know I know and I can tell you that you have written this poem at the perfect time......Remember that things will get better just gotta have faith in yourself. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Jenn...I am here too whenever you want/need to talk. Hugs and LOVE to you darlin. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
LoneWolf~ It's okay to hurt. It's okay to cry. It's okay to remember, when one says goodbye. But it also important to remember that you will go on to find another who will love you, true. It never seems that way when you're going through it ... but it will come. Keep the good memories ... and watch for the hope that tomorrow holds. *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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JnR4eva Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 377Bronx, NY |
I can't believe this  As I was reading I was saying to myself I hope it doesn't turn out that he or she walks out. Then I read the last stanza This is sooooo emotional and it's very innocent these lines, there is a purity to these lines which I can not explain but I enjoyed this sad piece. It is beautifully written."my love is my motivation my love is my inspiration perception of this poem is your interpretation" -- me |
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One Who Understands Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 251Cedar Rapids, Iowa |
I loved it! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
It's just so amazing what one goes through in a relationship. I think it is the most wonderful yet the hardest job that you can take on in a lifetime. I can feel the depth of your reflections here as they pour from the heart. When a poet writes like this and another poet can see, hear, and feel the emotional pain suffered, then the poet writing has done a marvelous job! Like Jeffery mentioned, faith in yourself is so important and some where along the line drop the gaurd and gamble again...human nature you know... |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
You must continue. . . you cannot let your life stop just because this has happened. . . seeing the other comments here, it would seem that others agree. Excellent poem. . . ------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Jeff . . . Thanks my friend. I know the time is right. Look back once before looking ahead. Paula . . . Thank you for the read and reply. I know you are.  Marge . . . My friend, thank you so much for the verse. You have touched my heart here. I know there will be another in time. The memories will be with me forever, but new ones will be made in he future. *HUGS* LW JnR4eva . . . Sorry to disappoint you with the end, but history cannot be rewritten. Glad you enjoyed this one. Yes, it is pure . . .comes from the heart . . . always. Thank you for the reply and welcome to our family!! One Who understands . . . Happy to hear that!!ethome . . . It is very amazing. Thank you for seeing, hearing and feeling my pain. That is what I was trying to convey here. Yes, I will gamble again . . .life goes on you know! Thank you!! Sven . . . I will continue on. My life will not stop for any man. Just not worth it. Thanks for reading. Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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ThUnDeRkYsS Senior Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 727Wisconsin |
Beautiful image, sad ending all at the same time. Lessons learned is all we can think of things like this as... {{{HUGZ}}} Great job. Strive for higher levels, if they seem out of reach... Grow, and they will get closer. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Well written, albeit sad... regards to you O Lone Wolf! sudhir |
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Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada |
Jenn, Just got back from vacation and went looking around. Ran across your name a few pages in and knew I had to read. My heart started to sink about half way through when I realized where it was heading. This is so sad, so very heart breaking that life should seem to turn for the worse. As feeble as it may sound, love does come in many forms, from many people. Someone as genuine as yourself deserves love of that magnitude in return. I hope that if it is not already found, that life will smile upon you soon and show you new love, perhaps even brighter than before. Beautiful poem, Jenn. Remember to keep smiling. Trev. |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
I will always remember When you walked out the door A piece of my heart From the whole tore The pain that I felt Scarred me forevermore ~~sighing ...felt every word Maureen |
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