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ggrn3
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0 posted 2000-08-20 07:24 PM


Totally shunned by the public
Left to wander the alleys and streets
Looked upon as dirty; and despised
Critique and criticized by everyone you meet.

You push your life down every road
And sleep virtually anywhere you can
The music of the streets crescendos
And the sand bites from automobile blown wind.

You grapple through despicable nights
Battling critters, varmints, and roaches for space
Awakening every morning, determined to go on in life
Wondering where you may receive a free plate.

And while you limp and creep along your way
Famished and torn from utter neglect
Trying to make it through another ill-fated day
While people treat you with no respect.




Garfield

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1 posted 2000-08-20 09:22 PM


A sad picture indeed....and many people live it  
ddgoose
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2 posted 2000-08-20 09:27 PM


ggrn3

You paint a sad picture - but from my own experience - it is a true picture.  Well done!

didi

ggrn3
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3 posted 2000-08-20 09:43 PM


Balladeer & didi
It is indeed sad, and thanks for your comments.

Garfield

Rosebud1229
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4 posted 2000-08-20 10:03 PM


ggrn, very true indeed thanks for sharing.
A reminder for us.

Meadowmuse
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5 posted 2000-08-20 10:20 PM


"And while you limp and creep along your way
Famished and torn from utter neglect
Trying to make it through another ill-fated day
While people treat you with no respect."


The portrait you've skillfully depicted here certainly is realistic. Having worked with folks who are struggling to live through each day, I see much truth in your verses. Thank you for voicing what so many of us don't seem to want to know or do anything about.  

~ Claire




Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau


Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
6 posted 2000-08-20 10:29 PM


Yes it is true and very sad and worse yet it just seems to keep on growing.....you paint the portrait well my friend.  Well done.
passing shadows
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displaced
7 posted 2000-08-21 01:05 AM


being in the security field, I see it almost every day...it's a sad thing indeed.
T McCoy
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8 posted 2000-08-21 01:35 AM


strange how life feels more real when you're "down in it" like that....
you've told it well...
  

Tony  

ggrn3
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9 posted 2000-08-21 06:06 PM


Rosebud, Claire, Mark, P.Shadows & T.McCoy

   Thanks for the comments guys.  I witnessed this first hand in Atlanta Georgia and my heart went out to these homeless people.  So yes, this peom is based on real life, real people.  I'm happy that I could capture this in poetic verses to share with all of you.  
Again thanks for the comments.



Garfield

brian madden
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ireland
10 posted 2000-08-21 06:39 PM


A powerful read, ow I know this feeling of alienation. very well written.

"Beyond all this good is the terror,The grip of a mercenary hand,When savagery turns all good reason, There's no turning back, no last stand,"I.Curtis

Paula Finn
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missouri
11 posted 2000-08-26 01:17 AM


I missed this the first time thru...glad to hve the chance to put it back on top...such a sad lonely write
CocoBaci
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12 posted 2000-08-26 01:39 AM


Amazing and powerful writing from a heart depicting truths of our world..

Coco  

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