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Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song

0 posted 2000-08-20 10:37 AM


When Eagles Soar

wisping crescents white
across the blue freedom sky
rests on eagles back


Mark Bohannan


my thanks to Janet Marie and Marge Tindal for all there help in teaching me this format.  Love you both.




[This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (edited 08-20-2000).]

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Meadowmuse
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1 posted 2000-08-20 10:45 AM


What a becoming image, Mark...this is lovely. You are obviously a gifted student.  

~ Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau


Poet deVine
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2 posted 2000-08-20 11:33 AM


Lovely image Mark! The symbol of freedom. I like.  
Martie
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3 posted 2000-08-20 11:36 AM


Mark--these few words gave me goose bumps--wonderful image you have painted!!
ethome
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4 posted 2000-08-20 11:38 AM


I don't know much about this format Mark but you have certainly done yourself proud here.. beautiful word pictures here.
Marge Tindal
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5 posted 2000-08-20 11:40 AM


MarkB~

Strength on the feather
Symbolic wings of soaring
Majestic eagle

*You, my friend, are a delight !
~*Marge*~



~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Janet Marie
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6 posted 2000-08-20 12:04 PM


YOU SOAR...
and you didnt need any help...
poetry is inside of you ...
love ya too
me

Butterflies_dont_cry
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7 posted 2000-08-20 12:37 PM


Not only eagles...you soared to another level with this...now you'll be addicted too...Marge's Haiku support group is growing   this was beautiful~
juliet_2u
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8 posted 2000-08-20 01:48 PM


Woohoo!!! I knew you could do it. Never had one single doubt. Mark this is excellent my friend. I'm smilin big time here.
Love,
Juls

Kit McCallum
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9 posted 2000-08-20 01:57 PM


Wonderful Mark ... visually stunning!  One of these days, one of you is going to push me over the threshold to try one of these ... I'm scared!  You've all made it look so easy ... but I know it's not!  

Beautiful Mark! Best wishes,
/Kit

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10 posted 2000-08-20 01:57 PM


You caught on perfectly!!!

-jaimie
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Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
11 posted 2000-08-20 02:45 PM


Claire-you are so sweet to say so.  It is fun I must admit as now I have many more.LOL

PdV-It means alot to me as well.

Martie-me?....give you goose bumps?....dont tell hubby.LOL...thank you.

ethome-YOU would be great at this...trust me.

Marge-

Eagle now soaring
upon wings of heavens kiss
tipping wings in thanks

JM-I need lots of help hon'..wanna volunteer to take on ALL my needs.

Holly-

from starlit dance done
eagle now soaring your way
resting in your heart

Juls-Sing on my dear poet....you soar in your clouds as well

Kit-once you get the first line the rest fall into place. Challenging YOU now...up for it or are you gonna back away.LOL

ladysixstring-Two teachers....how could I miss.  

Sunnyone
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12 posted 2000-08-20 02:56 PM



             Eagle in the tree
             Resting there so quietly
             Soon will take to flight..


     Mark....as I type this, there is an eagle outside my front window, a 100 yards away!  Have you ever seen a bald eagle take a nap??  Loved your Haiku....aren't they fun?


Today is a gift....
That is why they call it
'the Present'!



Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
13 posted 2000-08-20 04:05 PM


Sunny- I have seen many in flight and even resting ....but never taking a nap.....that must be so cool.  I thank you so much for your kind words to me always....and yes they are more than just fun.
Sunshine
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14 posted 2000-08-20 06:19 PM


Perfect!
Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
15 posted 2000-08-20 09:39 PM


Karilea-that one word says so much to me and I thank you dearly.  
ggrn3
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16 posted 2000-08-20 09:58 PM


Mark
  Your first Haiku... Excellent work. I echo the image of freedom from one of your earlier responders.

Garfield

linda munday
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17 posted 2000-08-21 12:14 PM


Very, very nice Mark,

You did very well with your first one, and judging by this, you will be writing more of them soon, of that I am sure.

Linda M.

Elizabeth Santos
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18 posted 2000-08-21 12:20 PM


Very well done. Looks like we got some Haiku lessons going on here. This is how I learn, from the other poets. You're already in the classroom.
Excellent vision in this Haiku
Liz

Sudhir Iyer
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19 posted 2000-08-21 03:43 AM


into distant skies
this eagle soars gaining heights
and free as the wind


lovely first haiku
from you, my friend, so well done,
freedom embodied

~regards~
=sudhir=

Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
20 posted 2000-08-21 02:22 PM


Garfield...thank you so much

Linda-yes, they are done...lol...addicted(yes)...and they shall be posted later today.

Liz-from two of the best.  Thank you much and I will still be in your class.  Sonnets you know.LOL

Sudhir-thank you kind sir....glad you took the first step.

kaile
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21 posted 2000-09-04 09:58 PM


Mark, i am in awe..this was a marvellous first attempt(mine however sucked big time)LOL

pls continue to pen more such gems for us..okay?

Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
22 posted 2000-09-05 04:16 AM


Kaile-I have and I will and thank you for digging this one up.  I was shocked to see it here.  Glad you liked it.
Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
23 posted 2000-09-05 04:17 AM


Kaile-I have and I will and thank you for digging this one up.  I was shocked to see it here.  Glad you liked it.
Kethry
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24 posted 2000-09-05 04:43 AM


Mark

small speck in the sky
eagle soars aloft this day
hunting game or prey

Now that you can see
Haiku's poetry in you
you never can stop

Be well
Kethry


"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-

Kit McCallum
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25 posted 2000-09-05 07:28 AM


LOL Mark! I think this came back to taunt me because I hadn't taken up the challenge you gave me above! So OK ... I did now (sort of) in Open 9 ... thanks for the fun!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

rosepetals25
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26 posted 2000-09-05 07:33 AM


Mark,

   Welcome to the land of Haiku   I love the Haiku and Tanka format.. they are challanging but so fun to do   Your haiku is beautiful.  

                        rp25

Steve B
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27 posted 2000-09-05 01:57 PM


Matk ~  good teachers were yours
        setting your words free to soar
        good pupil were you

    well done    Steve B


“The union of the mathematician with the poet,
fervor with measure, passion with correctness,
this surely is the ideal”

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