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Haiku #2... or is it not?? Morning Sounds
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Haiku #2... or is it not?? Morning Sounds |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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Warm sunday morning feathered friends of summer chirp sweet melodic tunes |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Good morning, Sudhir.... This is a nice way to start my day!! I love it...I hear the birds chirping! Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
 Sudhir~ Dawning of the morn Sounds of feathered friends abound Music greets the day ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Looks like you got it my friend....congrats....it is beautiful |
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juliet_2u Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 1125North Carolina |
Woohooo Sudhir, looks great to me. Love it my friend. Juls |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I can hear them singing now!  |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I can hear them too....wonderful words Sudhir |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Thank you all a lot for your appreciative words flowing with kindness |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Marge is very fast Quips a Haiku instantly Eqxuisitely done I think you,ve got the form down perfectly, Sudhir. You can read about Haikus on the net. There are different kinds. It seems the Japanese use some sort of break or change in direction just before the last line. I've got to go back and read that again Your Haiku is lovely and starts the day off with a smile, chirping birds. I love it Liz |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
August sun cooling as shadows march toward north seems autumn comes soon Great piece you did Sudhir, I love jumping on the haiku bandwagon. Parker |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
~Liz~ Marge might quip fastly But you are not slow either ~ Amazing ladies! regards sudhir [This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (edited 08-21-2000).] |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Parker, seems like you jumped right through... come on in, my friend... join in the fun... regards, sudhir |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
AHHH Sudhir...you have such a style and it fits haiku well |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Thanks a lot Paula... regards, sudhir |
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JnR4eva Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 377Bronx, NY |
This is beautiful Sudhir. Evoking imagery at first glance...that takes skill  "my love is my motivation my love is my inspiration perception of this poem is your interpretation" -- me |
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BSC
Moderator
Member Elite
since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Ah from the way these Haiku's are written, it seems you must have been bitten by a butterfly. They are simply lovely Sudhir. Off to find #1. Bonnie |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
JnR4Eva, Thanks, I am glad I could do that... Bonnie, A butterfly that bites... rather touched or caressed... Thanks a lot... regards, sudhir |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Bright the day for wings Calling from their feath'ry nests waking up the sun. Sudhir. I'm tired of saying it was well done. It was not it was badly done and starting a train of thought that will derail at any minute... but I lie. btw I wrote a poem entitled this butterfly bites. I may let you see it some day "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Welcome sweet morning summer sun and summer song morning's sweet welcome haiku you Sudhir for words well sung... |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Kethry, I hope that day is real soon... and thanks for a wonderful response, the second bit has left me a bit confused  Karilea, I always count upon you to make it a cheerful day... Thanks regards, sudhir |
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