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Michael G
Senior Member
since 2000-06-25
Posts 579
Nashville

0 posted 2000-08-20 07:10 AM


My love has no ending
though my heart could loose control,
my love has no feeling
for the pain I have now.
The surface of my body
cannot react without your touch
which at one time ignited me
and gave me so much.
But my love is now hidden
in the caverns of distress
for the loss of your kisses
and the 4 a.m. carress.
Though this road is new to me
it travels much the same
when my tears create torrents
of rivers with your name.

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Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium
1 posted 2000-08-20 07:20 AM


Michael, Quite an emotional one, here...

touching with some great lines.. I liked these...
Though this road is new to me
it travels much the same
when my tears create torrents
of rivers with your name


regards,sudhir

Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

2 posted 2000-08-20 01:04 PM


My love has no ending
though my heart could loose control,
my love has no feeling
for the pain I have now.
The surface of my body
cannot react without your touch
which at one time ignited me
and gave me so much.
But my love is now hidden
in the caverns of distress
for the loss of your kisses
and the 4 a.m. carress.
============================
I know baby...I know...
this is the part that sucks...
my 3am ache is well documented in poetry...
and i know it helps to write, as do you
this is so well written Michael,
and your rhyme is divine....
but as always with your work...
it is the expression of emotions that shine.
me

ladysixstring
Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 374

3 posted 2000-08-20 01:35 PM


Some wonderful lines... "The surface of my body cannot react without your touch"  and "when my tears create torrents of rivers with your name.


-jaimie
www.ladysixstring.com



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