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As my thoughts again rewind
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As my thoughts again rewind |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! 
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Just so you all know this is not something that I have experienced personally, and I hope I never will.....This was inspired by a friends tragic story Just wanted to let them know that I am thinking of them....ALWAYS!!! Today I found myself in tears Yes, crying once again Thinking of the love we shared Of walking hand in hand I recall that big bright smile The twinkle in your eyes Though you've been gone for such a while I dare not say good-bye I remember you asking "Daddy?" "What makes a garden grow?" "And how do the birds fly so high?" "Please? Tell me if you know!" I remember all the little things Took for granted in their time Images flash through my head As I slowly lose my mind The day you left us I asked God "why? He is so young!" "Why did you have to take him now?" "His life had just begun!" Then I shook my fist up to the sky And took God's name in vain And in my fit of anger I screamed Just as it began to rain Your little face is still so fresh Here upon my mind And I begin to cry again As my thoughts again rewind [This message has been edited by Jeffrey Carter (edited 08-19-2000).] |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Jeffrey* Heart ripping poetry my friend...you have certainly penned it as you would have lived it...a gifted poet with a heart of gold~ |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
When life just doesn't seem fair - and we have no comprehension of His greater plan... Poetry is at its best... Nicely done, JC..  |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
You've done well to portray the doubt, the loss, the pain, Jeffrey. It is very much this way. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
BDC, Thank you for the high compliment....just wish I could help in some way to make their pain disappear.....I only thought my life was bad until I thought of them....now my life seems pretty good by comparison Nan, Thank you ..... my frind is really having a hard time lately.....I just hope he can see that God does have his plans for us all Claire, Thank you.....I just put myself in his shoes and this is what came out......not easy to watch a friend suffer knowing that nothing I can do or say will make their pain go away......so I just pray for them |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very well expressed, Jeffrey. My heart goes out to your friend. Denise |
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Nikolette Sadness
since 2000-07-29
Posts 337port richey fl. |
jeffrey...i want to let you know that this has touched me like nothing else ever has...when i read it i felt like it was to me... yours, Nikolette i was once in love and happy...but you can call me Sadness. |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Denise, thank you very much Nikolette, That is probably the best compliment I ever got.....Thank you |
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ladysixstring Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 374 |
These always bring out my tendencies to be paranoid and over protective of my children... I never know how to comment. I try to read and keep it surface level... like peeking between your fingers when the movie becomes too scary. You did good. -jaimie www.ladysixstring.com |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
An exceptional piece of writing... so heartfelt and touching... regards to you Jeffrey, my friend, sudhir |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
You have told this tragic emotional story well...so much sadness...James |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Jeffery this is a heart rending work of poetic art....it's amazing how poetic lines can help the broken heart regain some strength and at least take some comfort from the memories....you have done a wonderful job here..I commend you! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
yes, I know...*staring out window*... |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Jeffrey, Wow, this was powerful and filled with emotion my friend. So glad it is not true, but sorry for those that it is true for. It is unfortunate that these things happen at all. Great writing my friend. Jenn Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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sarahC Member
since 2000-06-07
Posts 84Michigan |
WOW!! This Is Soooo sad....I am not sure I can find the words to express how deeply touched I am....you did a wonderful job expressing your friends grief in your writing here I hope your friend has read this...great job!  |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Jeff...what a friend you are to these people...hugs to you because I know you are feeling thier pain almost as deeply as they are...there are no words that can take this kind of pain away...just be there and listen, thats the best gift you can give them...and I know you will. |
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redwriter1 Member
since 1999-07-22
Posts 480Franklin, TN |
"my thoughts rewind" Some days we want them to and some days we don't. (sigh) very impressive writing Jeffrey. Kay-lynn **A dream is a wish your heart makes :) |
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