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juliet_2u
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0 posted 08-19-2000 08:48 PM       View Profile for juliet_2u   Email juliet_2u   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for juliet_2u

Crimson leaves falling
Twirling softly blue sky play
Tickling angel wings


Big big hugs and thanks to Marge, my haiku mentor.


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Marge Tindal
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1 posted 08-19-2000 08:58 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Juliet~
You did an awesome job with the true Haiku formatting,
5-7-5 touching nature's wonder.
I really enjoyed the 'falling' - twirling - tickling.

Now .... we won't be able to stop you.
It's so refreshing to see poets g r o w !

I'm so tickled for you !
Such enthusiasm is refreshing !
Love ya'
~*Marge*~


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juliet_2u
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2 posted 08-19-2000 09:03 PM       View Profile for juliet_2u   Email juliet_2u   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for juliet_2u

Awww Marge, ya got me cryin. I couldn't have done it without you and all your wisdom. And I love ya so too.
Love and biggggggggg hugs,
Juls
Mark Bohannan
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WAAAAAAHHOOOOOooooooo...this cowboy is so impressed that I called my horse over to take a read.   Way to go girl....your first of many I am sure.......it is just lovely and I like the tickling part best....LOL.......not gonna tell where though...     Beautiful piece my growing poet friend.  Congrats
juliet_2u
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4 posted 08-19-2000 10:16 PM       View Profile for juliet_2u   Email juliet_2u   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for juliet_2u

ROTF Mark and hey there horsey thanks for reading too. You are too much my friend. And many thank yous as I bow.Hehe...
Butterflies_dont_cry
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5 posted 08-19-2000 10:57 PM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry

I love these little gems...so much in so little.  Great work...you'll be addicted soon   lucky for you there's a "support group" here at Passions for you  
juliet_2u
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6 posted 08-19-2000 11:03 PM       View Profile for juliet_2u   Email juliet_2u   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for juliet_2u

Butterflies, lol, I'm already sooooo addicted. I just posted another one at the pub. LOL, no stopping me now. Thanks girly.
Juls
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7 posted 08-20-2000 12:42 AM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

Really cool Juls!!!

You know that Marge. . . she's just everywhere!!!  LOL  

Good job!!

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juliet_2u
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LOL, yeah she is Sven and she's awesome. Thanks for stopping in my friend.
Juls
Sudhir Iyer
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Juliet,
It is my turn to congratulate you on a lovely haiku....

WONDERFUL...

yes, great lady, that Marge...  

regards,
sudhir
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I have'nt tried one of these yet but I see this as being a very delicate and wonderful work of art.
juliet_2u
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Sudhir, thanks so much. You know that means alot to me. Yours was great too. We're flying now, hehe.
Juls
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Oh ethome, ya gotta try it. You'll love it and thanks.
Juls
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oopppss....look what fell back to the top!!!
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Great line.... "Twirling softly blue sky play"!!!

-jaimie
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Mark Mark Mark, what am I gonna do with you?...LOL
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Awww thanks so much Lady.
Juls
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Juls, this is one cool haiku. Yes and put me in for the tickling part too..... and I loved the haiku too.  

parker


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Parker, I'll tickle you any day too, hehe. Great to hear from ya.
Toodles and a big wink right back at ya,
Juls
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19 posted 09-04-2000 09:52 PM       View Profile for kaile   Email kaile   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kaile

Budding Haikiuists Unite!!!

i liked the second line "twirling soft blue sky play" and also the reference to the angel wings...

very nice haiku here
juliet_2u
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Kaile thank you so much for those kind words, they really mean alot.
Juls
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MORE >>> MORE >>> MORE~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

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the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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