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juliet_2u
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0 posted 2000-08-19 08:48 PM


Crimson leaves falling
Twirling softly blue sky play
Tickling angel wings


Big big hugs and thanks to Marge, my haiku mentor.



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Marge Tindal
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1 posted 2000-08-19 08:58 PM


Juliet~
You did an awesome job with the true Haiku formatting,
5-7-5 touching nature's wonder.
I really enjoyed the 'falling' - twirling - tickling.

Now .... we won't be able to stop you.
It's so refreshing to see poets g r o w !

I'm so tickled for you !
Such enthusiasm is refreshing !
Love ya'
~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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juliet_2u
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2 posted 2000-08-19 09:03 PM


Awww Marge, ya got me cryin. I couldn't have done it without you and all your wisdom. And I love ya so too.
Love and biggggggggg hugs,
Juls

Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
3 posted 2000-08-19 10:10 PM


WAAAAAAHHOOOOOooooooo...this cowboy is so impressed that I called my horse over to take a read.   Way to go girl....your first of many I am sure.......it is just lovely and I like the tickling part best....LOL.......not gonna tell where though...     Beautiful piece my growing poet friend.  Congrats
juliet_2u
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4 posted 2000-08-19 10:16 PM


ROTF Mark and hey there horsey thanks for reading too. You are too much my friend. And many thank yous as I bow.Hehe...
Butterflies_dont_cry
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5 posted 2000-08-19 10:57 PM


I love these little gems...so much in so little.  Great work...you'll be addicted soon   lucky for you there's a "support group" here at Passions for you  
juliet_2u
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6 posted 2000-08-19 11:03 PM


Butterflies, lol, I'm already sooooo addicted. I just posted another one at the pub. LOL, no stopping me now. Thanks girly.
Juls

Sven
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7 posted 2000-08-20 12:42 PM


Really cool Juls!!!

You know that Marge. . . she's just everywhere!!!  LOL  

Good job!!

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That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


juliet_2u
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8 posted 2000-08-20 12:46 PM


LOL, yeah she is Sven and she's awesome. Thanks for stopping in my friend.
Juls

Sudhir Iyer
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9 posted 2000-08-20 09:20 AM


Juliet,
It is my turn to congratulate you on a lovely haiku....

WONDERFUL...

yes, great lady, that Marge...  

regards,
sudhir

ethome
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10 posted 2000-08-20 09:28 AM


I have'nt tried one of these yet but I see this as being a very delicate and wonderful work of art.
juliet_2u
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11 posted 2000-08-20 10:12 AM


Sudhir, thanks so much. You know that means alot to me. Yours was great too. We're flying now, hehe.
Juls

juliet_2u
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12 posted 2000-08-20 10:13 AM


Oh ethome, ya gotta try it. You'll love it and thanks.
Juls

Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
13 posted 2000-08-20 05:08 PM


oopppss....look what fell back to the top!!!
ladysixstring
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14 posted 2000-08-20 05:16 PM


Great line.... "Twirling softly blue sky play"!!!

-jaimie
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juliet_2u
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15 posted 2000-08-20 05:22 PM


Mark Mark Mark, what am I gonna do with you?...LOL
juliet_2u
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16 posted 2000-08-20 05:23 PM


Awww thanks so much Lady.
Juls

Parker
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17 posted 2000-08-21 11:16 AM


Juls, this is one cool haiku. Yes and put me in for the tickling part too..... and I loved the haiku too.  

parker



juliet_2u
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18 posted 2000-08-21 11:29 AM


Parker, I'll tickle you any day too, hehe. Great to hear from ya.
Toodles and a big wink right back at ya,
Juls

kaile
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19 posted 2000-09-04 09:52 PM


Budding Haikiuists Unite!!!

i liked the second line "twirling soft blue sky play" and also the reference to the angel wings...

very nice haiku here

juliet_2u
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20 posted 2000-09-04 11:22 PM


Kaile thank you so much for those kind words, they really mean alot.
Juls

Marge Tindal
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21 posted 2005-02-27 12:58 PM



MORE >>> MORE >>> MORE~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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