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Tear Sailor
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ladysixstring Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 374
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Won't you lead me home tear sailor I'm afraid I've lost my way With a few more ends left to tie And a few words left to say It's been so many years now It hardly makes me cry Still, your memory brings joy to me And a tear to my eye Won't you lead me home tear sailor For the years have come and gone But time is of no consolation When you're tired from hanging on Still, I find no peace of mind No matter how I try But your memory brings joy to me And a tear to my eye -jaimie www.ladysixstring.com |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
Oh such a bitter sweet piece you've penned her Lady six string! I have not had the chance to read your work until now.... I'll be on the look out!  ~Sheri |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Oh, I can feel that loss, and the memory that is ever close. I too, remember and miss people from my past. And it seems as though the longing never completely goes away. Beautiful poem, the emotion came through clearly. catalinamoon Words are things, and a small drop of ink, falling, like dew, upon a thought produces that which makes thousands, perhaps millions think. Lord Byron |
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ladysixstring Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 374 |
Thank you Irie, and you catalinamoon, for understanding... -jaimie www.ladysixstring.com |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
I love the term 'tear sailor' and the way you have formed this poem...well done! |
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ladysixstring Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 374 |
Hi Martie, I was hoping someone would comment on the title... Thanks!! -jaimie www.ladysixstring.com |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I agree. Tear sailor is a very unique and clever title. You DO have a way with words, Lady ") |
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ggrn3 Member
since 2000-08-17
Posts 433Nahunta Georgia U.S. |
My dear Ladysixstring You've done it again. So elegantly penned. I believe you are fast becoming a favorite. Your already one of mine. Keep them coming. Garfield |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Lady6String~ Oh, the title caught my eye ... I greatly enjoyed the content of remembering. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
absolutely classy way with words... and the title... exquisite... Jaimie, enjoyed this one much... regards, sudhir |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Ladysixstring, A unique title and I enjoyed the read. |
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ladysixstring Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 374 |
Once again, you are all so kind... thank you. This was written for my grandmother who passed away a little over a month ago. I had been toying with the title for a couple of months but had no idea where to go with it. After I got the phone call about my grandmother... I picked up my guitar and wrote this in just a matter of seconds. I still feel it needs something more... but I'm not sure what... maybe what is missing is the chance to let my grandmother hear it. -jaimie www.ladysixstring.com |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Pehaps Jaimie. . . perhaps. . . but each time you play it. . . she hears. . . believe me. . . I know. . . Wonderful poem. . . your heart shows in this one. . . ---------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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tori Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 520Mechanicsville, Maryland, USA |
Love this one Ladysix... the bitter sweet memory If with pen in hand I've made you think I've not wasted one drop of ink Vlh. visit my site~ http://www.hsanet.net/user/dkm/hellomy.htm |
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