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As One Possessed When Demons Dance
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As One Possessed When Demons Dance |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
The band starts up 'neath glow'ring sky by heart I know the words They shun the light and with dischord clear thought becomes obscured The will is swayed as jostled leaf in cruel temptations breeze A fool's lament in bas relief as stark as barren trees About me dance the myriad to music none may hear Atonal in it's resonance yet pleasing to the ear It whispers long sought promises that cater to my needs In tongue befitting dark chaos it seeks to plant a seed And so begins a new cycle that feeds upon the last and dooms me to repeat the same mistakes made in the past Be ever vigilant my friends and careful how you choose Lest you would join me in this dance Signed, " One Who Wears The Shoes " [This message has been edited by Dr.Moose1 (edited 08-19-2000).] |
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ladysixstring Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 374 |
Oh, I truly enjoyed this... "And so begins a new cycle that feeds upon the last and dooms me to repeat the same mistakes made in the past" is outstanding. Each line took me heading towards another direction. -jaimie www.ladysixstring.com |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
How many times I have worn those dancing shoes! Very enjoyable read on a very familiar subject! Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
L Six, One of my darker pieces , usually I stay on the lighter side . Glad you liked it though . Doc Sunny1, Oh well , the guy that first said " creatures of habit " obviously had a few problems too ! Doc |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
too many great lines to quote... if i quoted all the good lines, i'd quote the entire piece... this one stands out: "The will is swayed as jostled leaf in cruel temptations breeze A fool's lament in bas relief as stark as barren trees" wonderful wonderful wonderful, my friend... you are one fine dancing versemaker... all the syllables, all the verbiage, every word in perfect place... fabulous!  ~ all you can really ever expect out of life is a good apology and some decent poetry ~ |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Doreen, Your flattery will most definitely go to my head . I thank you for your too kind words. Doc |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Another excellent piece, Dr. Moose! Love it! Denise |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
DrMoose~ Captured me in the trance of the dance ... 'The will is swayed as jostled leaf in cruel temptations breeze A fool's lament in bas relief as stark as barren trees' This is just a stunning render. The usage of 'bas relief' really got my attention. Brooding with intrigue. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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