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A different cinderalla story... another one inspired from Doreen...
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A different cinderalla story... another one inspired from Doreen... |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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Cinderella, the one with glass slippers couldn't help it for it was a minute past midnight and she forgot! She forgot to ask his name, the only one who could help her out with hitting the nail on the wall to hang a lofty painting of love... And she forgot! She forgot to even borrow a hammer, so she could have used a do-it-yourself book and hit the nail into the wall herself. Yes, she forgot. She did and so she used her glass slipper instead and hit the slipper on her head instead crucifying her fate... And the blood led her to rest in a painting of her own in misery with no one for company! Then came the fairy late, for the ferry that night had come a wee bit late. Seeing blood and misery splashed upon a lifeless painting, she waved her wand and there came a prince! A prince, who picked up Cinderella, held her and they smiled into each other's eyes and the fairy smiled too. She took out her Nikon camera and took a snap and the photograph took its place on the cover of a photo album instead of the painting being nailed on the wall... -------- Thanks once again, Doreen... for being such an inspiration... |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
Sudsy, this had me cackling. I immensely enjoyed your if/then style on this one, and the illogical logical steps.  |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
thank you for posting this, sudhir.... i thought it was very special when i read it as a response and it is even more special as a poem standing alone.... you are a pensive writer who uses imagery well... great lines in here !! it makes me happy to know my writing could be an inspiration to you... your creativity is magnificent... (alicat... QUIT cackling!  you do that a lot, don't you? hehe) |
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ladysixstring Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 374 |
well, I won't be sharing this little fairy tale with the kids... but, oh my... how I enjoyed it. -jaimie www.ladysixstring.com |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sudhir--this was great! So creative and interesting. Enjoyed it very much! |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
wonderful quick wit of yours as of late. You are becoming a master of his own style.....great read. |
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ggrn3 Member
since 2000-08-17
Posts 433Nahunta Georgia U.S. |
"And the blood left her to led her to lay in a picture of her own misery with no one for company." I loved this stanza. And I also agree with Mark, you are a master of your own style. It's great. I admire this originality. Garfield |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Alicat, that's a new cackling name you have chosen... another nick name... sudsy.. ;I am wondering Thank you..doreen, ...and I salute you once again ... My friend, you are a WRITER and I am just a person who tries to write... and that is exactly why I derive so much pleasure from reading so many wonderful works like yours and creating some loose-ended stuff myself... THANK YOU FOR ALL YOUR WORDS OF HIGH PRAISE... Jaimie, I am glad to note that you enjoyed... Thanks... Martie, thanks a lot for the 'great' compliment... Mark, thats another huge compliment... thanks garfield, thanks for pointing out the part you liked most... thank you... regards to all, sudhir |
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