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Sometimes My Dreams |
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ladysixstring Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 374
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Sometimes my dreams are found in the oddest places Somehow in time, even the strongest erases All the pages turn white No success or bright light And all my reasons to try Just fade away Somehow I fear I've failed for fear of failure And maybe I've cried more than I care to tell you No success or bright light No clear future in sight And all my reasons to try Just fade away Sometimes you lay your head against my shoulder And somehow you need me though you're growing older I look into your eyes You are my shinning light And all my reasons to cry Just fade away< !signature--> -jaimie www.ladysixstring.com My curiosity is getting the better of me... I popped back in to say... a cookie for anyone who can tell me what this one is about. *S* [This message has been edited by ladysixstring (edited 08-19-2000).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Ladysixstring, Good thoughts, good words, good poem. |
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ladysixstring Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 374 |
Thank you Seymour. -jaimie www.ladysixstring.com |
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ggrn3 Member
since 2000-08-17
Posts 433Nahunta Georgia U.S. |
Ladysixstring I wish I could tell you what this one meant. With you being a musician and a poet, I felt this one was about writer's block. But after reading it several more times, each stanza can be interpreted differently leading you to a different conclusion. Basically, I saying that I still don't know. This was written beautifully as always. Garfield |
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ladysixstring Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 374 |
Garfield, thank you for your honesty. It is funny how simple I feel this poem is... but somehow, this is the one piece that no one seems to get. However, I've only had men try to interpret... if this is any hint... I feel it will be a woman who guesses it first. *S* -jaimie www.ladysixstring.com |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Lady,...although I don't have any children of my own this poem sort of came to me as a tiny gentle touch from your child or a smile can just erase the hurt if atleast for the time being. They are precious. I may be waaay off but this is what it told me. Thank you for sharing this and take care. *Peace. |
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ladysixstring Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 374 |
Oh, you are close... very close!!! *S* -jaimie www.ladysixstring.com |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
first let me say this is awesome poetry.. your rhyme and cadence are perfect and the emotions rise off the page to me... as for my take on it... i read a woman feeling unrequited and uncompleted... lost in the losses... till she looks upon her child... feeling and knowing this is the one thing she did with perfection... and also about the unconditional love between parent and child right or wrong on my interp... the poem is excellent take care jm There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
ladysixstring.... This one should be a song. It's melody and words sing to me, and I feel what it says, but I cannot define it.....it is just there, like an angelic melody that doesn't need explanation.........Beautiful!!! Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I would say that this would be a beloved pet. . . but as fits your name. . . it might even be your six-string. . . teller of your stories, keeper of your secrets. . . sharing with all who care to listen, the stories of your life. . . As a musician, I know these feelings well. . . Excellent. . . ------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Wow we have a lot of musicians on this board, being one myself I love to hear it. I was thinking this was a kind of depression resulting from some sort of incompletion of set goals or something and that the child was the one redeeming factor encouraging you to press on.....my humble guess.. Regardless, this is wonderful poetry with everything so well said! |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
"Somehow I fear I've failed for fear of failure".... really really wonderful line... the poem/song is very clear to me... it is about love and change and the value of what's important... not the bright lights of fame on a stage, but the human relationships of those we love... and we can never quite "do it right" to quote myself...y'know?... no matter what we do, sometimes, we feel we haven't given enough, even when it was all we had to give... we have to accept what we can do, who we are, what we can fit in to the minimal amount of time god had given us on this planet... this poem can relate to a mother/child relationship or a relationship between lovers who are growing... it is a wonderful piece and i applaud you... and if i got it "wrong" as far as my interpretation, then, i say, so what? you have succeeded in creating something for the reader, who is me... to love and admire... thank you for a wonderful read  ~ all you can really ever expect out of life is a good apology and some decent poetry ~ |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
I so enjoyed reading this piece. After several reads, I still find it a mystery which is part of its appeal. Sometimes, it's better for the reader to think and attempt to invade the poet's thoughts. To spoon-feed the reader is just too simple. Great piece here! --You can either take me as I am...or you can watch me as I go.-- |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
sometimes in our dreams. Dreams do say alot about us even sometimes when we don't look at ourselves dreams reveal us. Maybe in your dreams you see youself achieving being on top where you have been trying to succeed all along. To me your needing comfort for your struggles which we all go through. Push and push it's your own struggle to succeed . Sometimes stopping along the way wondering where is it you wanted to go to start with. But then a little comfort, A little cry and then you can continue on your way. In life things are not always easy and this you convey in your poem that we all have failures but that is the only way we can rise to meet the challenge. This is what I felt from the poem. |
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