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bobbi
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since 2000-08-17
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0 posted 2000-08-18 05:03 PM



This intensity
Burning inside of me
Echoes thoughts of you
Inside my mind
Resounding your eyes back at me
Raw emotions
Maybe I need you
Or maybe I need this
Can you give me something real to hold on to?
And not just a prayer for a dream?
Should I wait for you?
Should I wait for a kiss?
Could I ever tell you?
I need you more than this
That in echoed thoughts of you we kiss
Imaginary conversations unfold
But I don't know what you say
At least in dreams you're mine alone
Echoed throughout my day

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Local Rebel
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since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767
Southern Abstentia
1 posted 2000-08-18 05:20 PM


Bobbi, passion and longing bleed from every line....
JulieAnn
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since 2000-06-12
Posts 754
Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!!
2 posted 2000-08-18 05:50 PM


Wow Bobbi...this HOT....very intense...
my favorite part.....?

I need you more than this
That in echoed thoughts of you we kiss
Imaginary conversations unfold
But I don't know what you say
At least in dreams you're mine alone
Echoed throughout my day

I can feel every emotion in this poem...hmmmm
must be in the air!!!  



Julie :)



SpitFire
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since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396

3 posted 2000-08-18 06:03 PM


~"Can you give me something real to hold on to?",....what very strong words you ask and with such desperation. This poem speaks volumes of want and need and passion. Well expressed. Nice writing. Take care B. *Peace.

Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05
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On the streets w/ people
4 posted 2000-08-18 06:20 PM


I really felt this one, it has great emotion.  Great work
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