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Almost more than Mercury
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Almost more than Mercury |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia 
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i've danced in cleavage pressed against my nose rejoicing in the scent of a brown eyed woman with her hair wrapped around my head blanketing me in passion... she glitters she slides lithe living me into nails gently tracing across skinned shoulders back and forth backing down into my face with scented hair and for a moment she is almost more than a thought almost more than fragrance almost more than mercury passing through fingers strong enough to break a heart |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
almost more than mercury, indeed.... this verse is very special... sorta reminded me of a road trip i took once but that's another story and this is your poem so i won't go into it right here... i enjoyed this very much... thank you for sharing |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
Thank you Doreen... perhaps your road trip is a muse??? love to read it... glad you liked this one..  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Oh...damn....so good, it's almost cruel... well, let's just say it changed MY mood entirely...and THAT makes you a poet, m'friend...smiles to you... |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Hi-Ho Local Rebel,...darn good writing here in this piece! WOW. Your words ate me up. Perfect. Take care LR. *Peace. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I really enjoyed this  and for a moment she is almost more than a thought |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
Thankyou very much to all.. |
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ladysixstring Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 374 |
Fantastic title... and after the first few lines... you know exactly why you chose said title. This is very good. -jaimie www.ladysixstring.com |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
thankyou ms. sixstring.... interesting website yours is... i Invite you to hit me too.. Insurrection |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
You focus wholly on fragrance, touch and imagination's influence in this lovely piece of writing...I found its sensuality quite striking. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Rebel--a very sensory, sensual poem with a killer ending...very much enjoyed! |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
rebel, you are certainly a man with style..... |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Hey, Hawk-man - you right in poetic terms with such apparent ease - I wish I had your talent... you say so much in so few lines, and your words leave me thinking. This is a great poem. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
...and all you hear from Florida is a whisking KER-PLUNK as passing shadows faints from her screen... |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Rebel~ You sent the 'mercury' rising with this one ! How lovely are your thoughts. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Yeah Rebel I really have to agrre with the rest...what a great example mercury...paints the picture very well! |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
wow this kind of took on a life of its own over the weekend.... thanks everybody..glad you enjoyed.... shadows, um, a little protein will keep you from passing out like that..!! (weg) |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
hey, really loved this, read it at home, but connection is so slow had to wait to reply til today, very softly erotic....and dang if it is just NOT what I needed to read this morning......lol...I got work to do, not fantasies to think about  |
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