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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion 
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The wheel turns, passion burns, the nights grow longer still, As loneliness, oh sweet caress, evades and thereby kills, The dreams of bliss, surrendered kiss, from forbidden feminine charms. Oh, heav'nly sleep, may my dreams keep me safe within your arms. Each night I lay my hopes away for a better day next morn, Where I may find, besides in my mind, the one for whom I'm born. But oh, alas, for what has passed me by this previous day, Those dreams I kept from when I slept, I allowed to slip away. And so it will be for the desperate me, that I seek you once again, And, tho' I long, with hopes and song, we shall be but passing friends. For my silent voice, neglecting choice, has failed in breaking through, To tell you of my undying love, and the dreams I have of you. The lessons learned, the pain it's earned, are all that now remain, From what was there, but now despair is all that I can claim. For in my need, my voice fails me, and lets you slip away, From what might have been, the where and when, once again this day. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Oh Wow Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
for a guy that kick's cats out into the traffic, you sure have one poetic romantic side which i'm very pleased to see... this is wonderful verse, mike... thank you for posting this... i will come back and read this several times, i'm sure...  (oh, but if pandora ever finds out about your romantic weaknesses... watch out!  i'll make sure i don't tell her... k?) |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Awesome - I love the internal rhyme - it's keeping thyme - with the big ole romantic sort you are....  |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Wonderful! I love this sir.  |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
There's only one old LongJohn, Thank God for this for sure, From kitty kickin and love poems, The women he tries to lure. How ya been ya sheep lovin nut? Hope you're doin fine, And Lorelei, (that poor poor gal) She's surely done her time. Please write my dear dear Suthern, Tell her I'm doin' great, I'll write her soon when I get my 'puter, Workin' at first rate. Till then I bid you all a big hello, And send my hugs and love, Say hi to all the old gang, Tell "Deer" to kiss a bug! |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Sunshine Girl - Thanks for that "Wow" - It mean a lot to me to have you read my words and then say something like that - Doreen - Yanno, Kitty kickin' is only something I write about - I'm pretty kind to animals, really. As for the nice things said about the romantic part of me - thank you - as for Pandora - I DARE ya to let her find out what a romantic guy I am. Nan - I always feel a little reluctant to stick my neck out with something that demands meter because I know you may read it, and there is no way I can possibly match your skill at this stuff. Of course, a couple hours at Hooters and more than a pitcher of beer help! lol Ms Devine - thank you for your sweet comment. I hope that revealing my romantic side does not tip off too many people to the fact that I love romance. It might go bad for my reputation... heh heh Mr Toe - You have lost none of your skill at writing with a sense of humor. Its so good to see you posting again. You've deprived us all for way too long. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
LongJohn~ *Siiiiiiiiigggggggggghhhhhhhhh ! Oh, what a lovely write. I really enjoyed the inside rhyme ... what an enticing scheme. I thoroughly enjoyed this ! ! *TOE .... you been gone too long ! Take care of yourself and get on back here more often ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Dawn Eclipse Senior Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 637The Horsehead Nebula |
That was a beautiful piece. I was awe struck. Please write more, i'd love to read it. "The universe is full of magical things patiently waiting for our wits to grow sharper." Eden Phillpotts *Cassandra Roseen* |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Marge - Yanno, those long sighs really get to me - you've got to learn to control that weapon much more carefully! lol - Thank you for your compliments - you are so prolific, and I just hack along - I'm very honored that you read this poem. Dawn - Actually (in a shame-faced attempt to promote visits to past Open Poetry Forums), I have written a lot of poems for Forums. My muse is becoming much more fickle (the lil twerp), and I'm very busy at work of late, so my rate of production has gone way down. Thank you for your very much needed compliment. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Those sleepless nights in the past's embrace can indeed evoke much poetry...this is a lovely testimony to that fact. I enjoyed it. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wonderful LngJhn! The lovely internal rhyme allows this beautiful poem to flow as the tender and romantic lullibye it is ... very nicely penned! Best wishes, /Kit |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
And here I thought I was going to read something about the silence of the kitties you kicked around  The romantic poppin out in you! Wonderful writing LJ. It's great to see you here again. TOE!! Been far too long buddy! Come back soon!! |
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tori Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 520Mechanicsville, Maryland, USA |
Wow is an understatement!! The why's, what ifs, what evers, could have, What might have been, if only we could have said them~ right there~ and then! I really loved this one LJ... A sigh from me too.... just not as long winded as Marge.lol Just kidding Marge... If with pen in hand I've made you think I've not wasted one drop of ink Vlh. visit my site~ http://www.hsanet.net/user/dkm/hellomy.htm |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Wow, you've outdone yourself, LongJohn! With this poem you have captured the essence of longing, how it claims your dreams, seems untouchable and haunts your reality. Beautiful work! Corinne |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
LJ this is absolutely BRILLIANT poetry... my goodness where should I begin to worship it properly... the accomplished rhyme scheme is awesome the poem is perfect from conception to completion ... and the emotions and imagery... are so well expressed and defined -- that the reader feels their pull... they lift off the page.... extraordinary work here my poetic pirate sir ... Im leaving this post with MAJOR poetic envy. I do so wish I'd of wrote this gem. later-awed-me-gator jm There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Oh, I happen to love this rhyme scheme you got going here....great, well thought out poem |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Cheeeeezzzz....I wish I had written that.......but then again it would have not had the touch of the pirate. You have penned a beautiful creation and so many of these words and sentiments are closely related to me. Thank you for your wisdom in thought and your talent to share them so well. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Long John--this is poetry at its best...the feeling of romance and longing heart and the perfectly fine rhythm make me want to dance or cry, but I'll smile instead and shout, Bravo! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
I love the rhyme scheme in this, it's not always easy to do, but you carried it throughout the poem Excellent work! (Look who's talking!) Liz |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Thank you one and all for your comments. Feedback from fellow poets is always the best form of encouragement. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Beautiful romantic flow and rhythum combined just absolutely wonderful work! Enjoyed thoroughly! |
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