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jwesley
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0 posted 2000-08-18 01:53 PM



Taketh This Heart

Doth thou not seeth me at all
As an object of thine affection?
When thou thinkth of me
Doth thou not seeth mine heart cries for thee?
Canst thou seeth these jagged lines
That splitth mine heart in two?
Canst thou tellth by mine painful cries
This loveth I have will e'er be true?
Taketh this heart I holdth in mine hand
It 'tis not mine any longer, to command.
If thou canst not find a way to make it thine
Then letth it ne'er be returned
to this breast of mine.

w. james beard, jr.

(...playing with some things I've picked up here...not sure it's all proper but it's close I think...jimmy)

© Copyright 2000 Wesley James Beard, Jr. - All Rights Reserved
Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
1 posted 2000-08-18 02:09 PM


you're on a roll...
catalinamoon
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The Shores of Alone
2 posted 2000-08-19 06:16 PM


Jimmy, I think this was great, and I like the old style writing.
catalinamoon


Words are things, and a small drop of ink, falling, like dew, upon a thought produces that which makes thousands, perhaps millions think.
Lord Byron

Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
3 posted 2000-08-19 06:20 PM


Beyond antiquity and into the world of old......beautiful verse and keep playin...from where I sit you are doing better than just fine.
juliet_2u
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4 posted 2000-08-19 07:38 PM


I thought it was just lovely Jimmy. Keep up the good work.
Juls

CocoBaci
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5 posted 2000-08-19 08:10 PM


Well I read this poem and you take me back to a distant time and for this display of what you say is your poetic playing around ... hmmm keep on playing!!!!!!

Coco  

jwesley
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Spring, Texas
6 posted 2000-08-19 11:25 PM


Gosh...didn't realize so many liked this style of writing.  As Sunshine knows I'm sure, it's really fun to write...make all kinds of mistakes...but it's still fun.  Thanks for the support.


jwesley

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Sven
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7 posted 2000-08-20 12:48 PM


Good sir, thou hast indeed written a poem in the language of the Knights of olde. . . for that alone, I am most greatful. . .

But to writeth a poem of such grace and style. . . well. . . that just maketh it all the more superb. . .

Well done. . .

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That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


jwesley
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since 2000-04-30
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Spring, Texas
8 posted 2000-08-21 09:56 AM


Thank you Sven.  Have enjoyed of I've seen of your poetry also.

jwesley

Paula Finn
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missouri
9 posted 2000-08-21 10:41 AM


I love the way this tastes when I say it out loud...lovely lovely write
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