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Now Let's Get Serious
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Now Let's Get Serious |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA 
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Now Let's Get Serious Here I am thinking, let's get serious when who am I kidding. I am the most serious one around. Not that I pen serious thoughts, my gosh, no. I can only write what many consider "fluff". Oh I am venting just a bit not for attention, not at all. Just wondering why I am the "chosen one" to receive the loving criticism, of all those who wish to let me know, what it is, I should write. "I hate when you write sad", one says. It shows your talent, not. And If you should write more than three It means you've just forgot That life has so much more to hold For you, just take a chance And you will see, that happiness Is awaiting your next dance. Sighing now, I feel depressed Will someone call this sad? Or is it just a thoughtful stream In release to not go "mad". Have you ever been told you poems "stink" In a post that's just for you? And many times, not just one post And certainly, more than a few. They've tried to break my spirit. This time, they may have won, For when this poem's finished I, too think I may be "done". It's hard to always "front" me Hypersensitive, they say it's true. Born this way and for 51 years What would you suggest I do? Cater to all those who dislike me so For reasons, I can't define? If ever I've felt myself broken, Today's the day, this time. It all adds up...one by one The bricks, now piled so high. I'm almost closed behind that wall And shutting my mind's eye. I think it not so very fair To always be denied The me I am, the one expressed In words, I've sometimes cried. No tears for me, just another day Another hurting real. Hopefully, tomorrow brings Some sense to how I feel. To end this now, I've said enough But one last thing to you, This IS the warmest respit found A place I'd settle to. Thank you.... feeling...Once in a ...Blue Moon 8*2k |
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ladysixstring Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 374 |
Feels like one of those moments where your thoughts read like words flashing across your mind's eye and it's all you can do to keep up. I have a hard time, however, believing the line... "Have you ever been told you poems 'stink'" has ever happened to you. *S* Great job!! -jaimie www.ladysixstring.com |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
who said what to you!!???? let me at 'em! one of the greatest things about passions is the moderation of this board because negative comments against people are not tolerated... just as it should be in daily real life... i would think this poem stemmed from something that was said on some other poetry board and not here...  as far as writing a variety of moods, you've spoken to my heart here because that's what i do, too.... i write when i'm stressed, i write when i'm in love, i write when i'm angry, i write when i'm sad... and those writers, like yourself, who do the same are the ones i admire most... nice job with this one... i respect a person who speaks her mind ~ all you can really ever expect out of life is a good apology and some decent poetry ~ |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ah Maureen, such lunar landings! Well done! |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
Excuse me for interupting....I usually read, enjoy and go, often not posting,...but according to doreene I may not have a home here anymore, for I just threw up on Sunshine's poem!!  MMoonchild, you have done a lovely job putting my feeling to this poem! ~wonderfully written~ Marcy ps: i am shutting down now. |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
-jaimie it's the truth but you won't see that here..you will see all levels of writing, all different poets from all walks of life accepting one another and enjoying what they read, sad, funny, sensual...or dark...what a wonderful place this is ~~soft smiles M |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
doreen thank you..it is a little more work being on a forum that has so many poets and poems to read and respond to. When I first came I just enjoyed being able to read such variety..didn't know if I would grow to love it..but I have and I brought a few others over to take a look and they have remained also....some poets don't like moderated forums and I don't mind criticism..but if someone is going to choose to do so then tell me what it needs to be a better piece of writing...and if they really just don't like my style or my personality or whatever comes through then I would suggest those persons don't read me as my name is there plain to see on each..this happens on many forums..and there are new ones trying to be like passions everyday..but it takes hard work from many..and you have somehow succeeded here...and I applaud that..by thanking all Maureen now...off my soapbox for the day... |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
Sunshine Cute answer ~~smiling Maureen |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
Marcy thank you for allowing me to speak your words.. MM |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
maureen.. you said, ".some poets don't like moderated forums and I don't mind criticism" i feel the same way and post at unmoderated forums as well... yes, there are many out there... this one is special and we are all so very glad you are here.... if you want critique, go to "critical analysis" forum... ron has apparently thought of everything... LOL... *wink*... and yes, i agree in full totality... people get to know the poet... if they don't like my style, they don't have to read me... and so be it... god bless... carry on and keep writing your very wonderful verse... you are a talented poet and i enjoy each one |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Hi Maureen, As always, a wonderful penned writing by you. And only my opinion. I have read many poems that you have written, and not one have I not enjoyed. Maybe, that's why I keep coming back to visit. Have a nice day. |
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ggrn3 Member
since 2000-08-17
Posts 433Nahunta Georgia U.S. |
I've read a few of your lovely penned peoms and I may not have typed a response to them all, but you can't stop. I hope you were just venting. Garfield |
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