»
Archives
»
Open Poetry #9
»
Room of Love
| Open Poetry #9 |
|
Room of Love |
|
|
Michael G Senior Member
since 2000-06-25
Posts 579Nashville |
Alone in the room of love she answers to a god that seems to lack any reason, she forces herself to attempt some kind of absolution but fooling herself is the way she cannot feel. She falls down to say why is this my pennance the silence remains and gives her the answers so with pen and vengence she writes to the world save me before I am forgotten and this time I'll remember my love for it's true, that you lose your memories what you don't remember to use. He crumbles at her source of inspiration a thousand miles and he cannot give her flirtation for he sees he is last and drifting over days and forgotten the way to hold her dear like he always used to. And they're drifting in a house that has no completion the room of love is a tomb for their failure. |
||
| © Copyright 2000 Michael G - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
Christopher
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Wow. Quite impressive here!  Great imagery and usage of metaphors! |
||
|
Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
She falls down to say why is this my pennance the silence remains and gives her the answers so with pen and vengence she writes to the world save me before I am forgotten and this time I'll remember my love for it's true, that you lose your memories what you don't remember to use. He crumbles at her source of inspiration a thousand miles and he cannot give her flirtation for he sees he is last and drifting over days and forgotten the way to hold her dear like he always used to. ================== so..how did ya get to be so wise anyway ... I know...comes from living it.  I "ditto' all that Chris said ... sincere, wisdom filled poem Michael. jm |
||
catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Superb poem, very touching story, well crafted. Loved it. catalinamoon |
||
|
juliet_2u Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 1125North Carolina |
Michael, this said so much. I was totally impressed. If you don't mind I'm gonna add it to my library. Take care, Juls |
||
|
Michael G Senior Member
since 2000-06-25
Posts 579Nashville |
Thank you guys for the kind words, JM- yes on occasion, as I think we all do.. and Juls I'm honored...... |
||
|
Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
very much adored from afar your words fill this room with so much love. Though you would think buried they now have come alive your words seen to mingle and make us all aware that their is such a thing is true love. Very good Micheal once again. |
||
|
ladysixstring Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 374 |
I have a habbit of looking for the one line or two in a poem that really stands out to me as clever, meaningful, beautiful, something that just sums it all up, sets the tone, brings life to the piece... I read this twice and have come to the conclusion that they all pull their own weight... each and every line is completely equal in all of the qualities mentioned above. -jaimie www.ladysixstring.com |
||
|
Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
This holds wisdom and a great deal of insight Michael. To live in entrapment is not living at all. Very nicely written. Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
