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JnR4eva
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since 2000-08-07
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Bronx, NY

0 posted 2000-08-17 04:05 PM


A humming bird
majestic in its flight
creates gossamer strips of wind
in the moon's frail light.

Thrusting against the petal's crest,
he burns with desire
stupefied he is,
showing no signs of tire.

Longing for that sweet nectar
which was abundant three sunsets before
rigid is that lily
which once bared its core.

Loyal is the humming bird
for that lily's nectar did it share,
a passionate taste of life
by which no other flora could compare.

Thus denied of its precious sweetness
the humming bird retreated for another day.
Awaiting in the bushes as the stealth predator,
and the lily as his prey.

Yet many moons passed
and the humming bird lost its many hues
to take flight of fancy
the humming bird can no longer do.

Then one day, he walked to the stem of that lily
to bid his final good-bye.
Treading on shearing black pebbles
did the humming bird die.




"my love is my motivation
my love is my inspiration
perception of this poem
is your interpretation"
-- me

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ladysixstring
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since 2000-07-27
Posts 374

1 posted 2000-08-17 04:28 PM


Love of a humbird for his lily... love of a man for his woman.   Beautiful story!!

-jaimie http://www.ladysixstring.com

Sudhir Iyer
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since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium
2 posted 2000-08-17 04:30 PM


Such an imagery... such personification... so rare... so beautiful...

WOW is all I am stuck on for now...

Regards,
sudhir

JnR4eva
Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 377
Bronx, NY
3 posted 2000-08-18 01:57 AM


ladysixstrings
well u have certainly given ME a new perspective to look at onto this poem....thank you very much I appreciate your interpretation and kind words .

sudhir
u are so silly...u need not say anymore than what you have said!    you have lifted my spirits with ur kind words. Thank you so much for taking the time to read it    


"my love is my motivation
my love is my inspiration
perception of this poem
is your interpretation"
-- me

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