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Ebony Phantoms Twisting
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Ebony Phantoms Twisting |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments 
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Ebony phantoms twisting < !signature-->Through sinew of the sky Showered by the toxic tears That poisoned angels cry. Murmurs haunt the icy air Whispering with reckless ease Blood falls thick in ruby veils Forming ringlets on the breeze. Sable satin flutters softly Torn by stabbings of my mind ‘Neath graying slabs of granite night Shreds of soul I find. Tawny arms of decaying wood Form a skeleton of broken dreams A place once clothed in rainbow light Now no more than rotting beams. A chiming giggle floats in thought Her innocence short, so fleeting I watch her now in memory Blood spraying from the beatings. Tiny body, swollen, dead I held softly in my arms My sister’s spirit is gone from here And no more can she be harmed. The phantoms now, they come for me Their eyes shine raven dark With trembling skin I feel them near While the shadows make their mark... (note: this is not based on personal events) *Krista Knutson* "You never lose by loving. You always lose by holding back." -Barbara DeAngelis [This message has been edited by Alwye (edited 08-17-2000).] |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Krista, WOW this is haunting, so beautifully writting hon and I am so glad this is not based on personal events  Wonderful work as always dear |
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Dusk Treader
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Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 1187St. Paul, MN |
Wow.. this is without a doubt the single most darkly haunting poem I've read in a long time. I'm also ever so glad this doesn't stem from personel events... Greatly enjoyed this verse "Tawny arms of decaying wood Form a skeleton of broken dreams A place once clothed in rainbow light Now no more than rotting beams." Greatly adored that one, cool image... Enjoyed this poem much sweetheart. And loved the last verse too, great ending! Abrahm Simons "Keep on dreamin' boy 'cause when you stop dreaming it's time to die" - Blind Melon |
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Silkdragon Member
since 2000-06-24
Posts 65 |
krista, this is awesome. dark and tragic, very sad but beautiful. i LOVE the verse: form a skeleton of broken dreams a place once clothed in rainbow light now no more than rotting beams. i also love the last verse. very well done. this is great. erin |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
You can sure get the heart pumping Well done |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wow! I'm so glad this is not based on personal events too Krista! Incredibly haunting words, struck right into my soul, they did ... your imagery is absolutely stunning. Very nicely penned! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Krista~ Very moving ... ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
one word ... awesome |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Amazing! I knew you wrote good 'lighter' stuff, but this amazes me! Very, very good. Keep stretching your poetic muscles!  |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Nicely written... enjoyed muchly. |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Thank you all so very much, I'm glad you enjoyed! *Krista Knutson* "You never lose by loving. You always lose by holding back." -Barbara DeAngelis |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Krista, this is different that everything I've seen you do....and it's terrific! Very versatile, my dear |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
...poisoned angels cry. I LOVE that! Onward m'friend, onward. C. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Haunting, full of splendid images... How I wish I had written this one... Regards, sudhir |
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