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Storm Down |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Storm Down Bring me thunder, stake this thick air to the ground to the ground with a sizzling sword, dazzle with drenching this braided hair, touch these eyes with sparklers of sky fire, perfume the dirt, storm down. Take this cloud of white bellowing promise and blow it over and down the pass, furl the rabbits’ soft, bead the dove’s feathers imprint the quails trail, lay the lupin sideways and release the scotch broom’s sweet the sage’s pungent, storm down. Dapple across this water and crease the fabric, let me see your thread stitch the sky to earth, storm down. |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Martie, Oh yes my dear let it rain till next week, this poem is drenchingly beautiful and at a cool 98 in my house I would let it rain in the house just to cool off, very much enjoyed. Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Hi Cerenity...I thought you must live in California...since you knew so perfectly how I felt...thanks for your reply...never thought of raining in the house...what a good idea.  |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Marty ... we've had so much rain here this year , we'd gladly share it if we could  this poems worth at least a couple hours of gentle rain and a cool breeze from the man himself Hope he reads here at Passions |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
*sighs* I love the rain...and we had our first good rain in a very long time today. Wonderful verse here Martie, as always. *Krista Knutson* "You never lose by loving. You always lose by holding back." -Barbara DeAngelis |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ 'Dapple across this water and crease the fabric, let me see your thread stitch the sky to earth, storm down.' What a plea ! On spirits of the ancient ... I would ask the quenching ... Cherokee sends invocation ... forbearance of a drenching ... 'storm down' Sent with love~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I love the stitch the sky to the earth line. When you can see a rainfall in the distance that's exactly what it looks like.....amazing poetry here Martie.......hope you get the rain you need....I may have to come down there and do a rain dance for you.. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
WOW OH WOW OH WOW... glorious, exquisite, .... regards, sudhir |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
I am with others..I wish for you to sop up some of ours and our gray skies too although today seems just perfect here so far..I have 2 huge scotch brooms as large as well 10 ft diameters maybe and when they bloom in spring the whole neighborhood is always saying..where is that sweet fragrance coming from.ahhhhhh it's Sweet Maureen's wonderful writing by the way |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Rex Allen--I'm sure the man reads here at Passions, but the rain..not sure...just send me some of yours. Krista--Yes, the rain and a good storm do get the ions going. Marge--were you dancing when you wrote that...It hasn't worked yet. ethome--come on down and enjoy the sunshine...would love to see you do a rain dance Sudhir--thanks for that double wow...you're sweet. Maureen--You are lucky to have scotch broom in your yard...it grows like crazy in our mountains. Thanks for the reply...I hope you have some blue sky. [This message has been edited by Martie (edited 08-17-2000).] |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Martie,...strong writing here. Gosh, the feelings this brought on. You are magical like that. Take care now. *Peace. |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
classically GREAT poetry - !!!!!! wonderful I really liked this - like a prayer to the gods of rain |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Dapple across this water and crease the fabric, let me see your thread stitch the sky to earth, storm down. Love this verse! Wow! God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie, my friend~ My great grandmother shared the chant of rain with me. Patience, my friend. I'm e-mailing you ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Be careful, Martie. I have it on good authority that Noah said the very same thing!! Funny.....I took this as a love poem. Either way, it's great!!! |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
SpitFire--how lovely to be called magical...I think the same of you. Bill--Marge just sent me a prayer I'm gonna try. Eagle One--So glad that you enjoyed my poem...thanks. Marge--you are too good to me!! |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sorry dear, didn't see you..it is a love poem!! |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
A very visual, piece Martie. I like the line where you said,"to the ground with a sizzling sword". Now that line was very creative and very good! You're one of the better poets on this board, Martie (in my opinion). Great piece and thanks for sharing. Nathan |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
One thing is certain Martie, the level of your writing never wavers... another exceptional versing... |
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