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spiked
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since 2000-01-13
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Hammond, La USA

0 posted 2000-08-16 11:40 PM


Loss
Of words
Of feeling
Of emotion
Lost
In thought
In life
In direction
Pathways in life
Sometimes lead us
In a direction
We had no intention of going in
Leaving us lost
Alone
Looking inward for
Answers
Who knows what has yet to be found.



[This message has been edited by spiked (edited 08-17-2000).]

© Copyright 2000 Richard Rendall - All Rights Reserved
serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

1 posted 2000-08-17 12:08 PM


sometimes we get so focused on the destination, we forget to enjoy the journey....stop awhile, rich, find a shady tree and rest a bit...sometimes the best path is the one we make ourselves....hope that made sense...smiles and hugs, ya knows I love ya!
spiked
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since 2000-01-13
Posts 873
Hammond, La USA
2 posted 2000-08-17 03:55 PM


Thank you serenity,
Sometimes we also get so caught up in the journey we lose our sense of direction.

Sunnyone
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since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England
3 posted 2000-08-17 04:16 PM


Hi Spiked....

            Sometimes the only way to find your way is with the help of a good friend. I liked the thought behind this, and you wrote it so well!!


Today is a gift....
That is why they call it
'the Present'!



serenity blaze
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4 posted 2000-08-17 04:31 PM


And rich, just wanted to let you know I did not pay Sunny1 to post that reply, but as far as I'm concerned, it's pure gold...hugs to you anyway.
JnR4eva
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since 2000-08-07
Posts 377
Bronx, NY
5 posted 2000-08-17 05:35 PM


i think what makes this poem what it is, is the simplicity and its straight foward message...very nicely done  

"my love is my motivation
my love is my inspiration
perception of this poem
is your interpretation"
-- me

spiked
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since 2000-01-13
Posts 873
Hammond, La USA
6 posted 2000-08-17 08:41 PM


Thank you Sunny1 I have many around me.
Serenity didn't cross my mind but now think it's time to run an investigation into your dealing lol
Thanks
JnR4eva sometimes things are easier to see when only the main point is written
Thank you all
Rich

ddgoose
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since 2000-07-25
Posts 250
Baltimore, MD, USA
7 posted 2000-08-17 08:53 PM


Spiked

Everyone gets lost from time to time.  Stop and smell the roses under a big shady tree and it will all get better.  You did a great job with the poem.

didi

spiked
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since 2000-01-13
Posts 873
Hammond, La USA
8 posted 2000-08-18 01:43 AM


Thanks didi not really lost just misdirected
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