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In Mine Eyes
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In Mine Eyes |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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In Mine Eyes You are there in mine eyes simply stare into mine eyes do not harbor weak goodbyes but look direct into mine eyes simple come you did just that simply go here's your hat. I came clean I told the truth know I'm not a teller's booth here you are no shining star but here I've raised the tell-tale bar. ©Karilea Rilling Jungel 16 August, 2000 |
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Elizabeth
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since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
I liked the verse about coming clean...good work.  Elizabeth Why ME??? |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Elizabeth, just so, and that you are my grandmother's name, as it should be... |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
"do not harbor weak goodbyes but look direct into mine eyes" words of wisdom... wonderful verse here, K...! thanks for a pensive look inside a special poet's heart |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
may I say... Wisdom personified ... by divine sunshine regards sudhir |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Nicely penned Sunshine! Much enjoyed this gem and it's wisdom!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Doreen, Sudhir, Kit, thank you... Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
I came clean I told the truth know I'm not a teller's booth Your wisdom and your strength in belief of yourself is so evident and I must applaud your honesty in all you share. Excellent verse and power packed. |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Isn't it amazing, Mark, how you can just know when poets are drawing on truth and experience? Thanks so very much for your comments...I always treasure them... |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Sunshine. . . just wonderful my friend. . . just wonderful. . . -------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank you, Sven... Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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ladysixstring Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 374 |
Direct and to the point... very nice rhythm on this one. -jaimie http://www.ladysixstring.com |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank you Jaimie... Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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ggrn3 Member
since 2000-08-17
Posts 433Nahunta Georgia U.S. |
Sunshine I loved this pensive work. I liked the rhyme you used and the verses were short and to the point. Excellent!!! Garfield |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I would have used the word "terse", but pensive works, too! Thank you, Garfield... |
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