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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Hey Passions, please bare with me on this piece because it's not in the usual poetic form. I just experimented with this one poem because I thrive on being different and original. I hope that y'll like it..if not, feel free to criticize. Pen-tastic........ Poetically inclined, to elevate your mind. Pen-tastic........ Once my thoughts accelerate like a rocket blast, my pen starts flowing like a seismograph. Pen-tastic........ Poems overflowing with soul and such vivid imagery, as the equation, makes such a beautiful chemistry. Pen-tastic........ Rhyming straight from the ark of my heart, painting picturesque visuals like Mozart. Pen-tastic........ Poetry written with meaning and integrity, giving my readers, a dose of metal therapy. Pen-tastic......... Rhymes that will be remembered for years and centuries to come, as my rhymes circulate, to bring the world, together as one. Pen-tastic......... My mind is the instrumental to which my pen quotes, as the melody floats, with the buoyancy of a boat, as my imagination gets stretched to the elastic, with magnetic flows, that classify as pen-tastic. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I like it, I like it! Catchy style! Denise |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Nate, you used some clever wording here. The title alone is a good play on words..... |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Yeaaah, I'm glad that you two like it, Denise and Balladeer! Thanks for the nice comments too! Nathan |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Nate, my friend~ Elevated indeed ! Nice play ... ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Thank you Marge, for your nice comments. Nathan |
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ggrn3 Member
since 2000-08-17
Posts 433Nahunta Georgia U.S. |
Nate Dogg I was intrigued by the way you wrote this one. It seemed on the verge of a hip hop lyric. I could feel the beat as I read it. Experiment a success. Keep being original. Garfield |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Great observance, Garfield. You know, I'm a hardcore hip-hop fan as 25% of my best poems are influenced by deep and conscious hip-hop songs. I've always thought that I'm a poet with a hip-hop mentality. Anyways, thanks for the brilliant post. Nathan |
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sarahC Member
since 2000-06-07
Posts 84Michigan |
Wow this is good...and I like the style....dare to be different anytime you want!!!  |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Thank you Sarah, for your wonderful comments. Nathan |
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JnR4eva Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 377Bronx, NY |
LOL I hope you take no offence to this, but it reminds me of a rapping  I listen to rap somewhat(ever since Christopher Wallace(BIG) died I kinda lost interest in it)... and now i'm more into r&b and I just thought of someone free styling when i read this work...cool job...lol ok i have to admit..but i used to do some of this myself back in high school and elementary school i enjoyed this a lot "my love is my motivation my love is my inspiration perception of this poem is your interpretation" -- me |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Thank you JnR4, for your comments and I would like to read some of your hip-hop flavored poems. Nathan |
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