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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Clouds Clouds fill our edge of space With feather white of floating lace. Of moisture formed in distill In ever changing winds that mill. To me the clouds are argosy A theater full of fantasy. Actors on a celestial stage A performer that does not age. Multi faced and of endless tide Changeable as Jekyll and Hyde Warming forming terror and peace To me it is my pure surcease. Charging chariots on the breeze Sailing shadows over the trees. Tumbling forms in a constant roll An Eden to my mind and soul. I face my face unto the sky And see and hear its lullaby. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I love this seymour, I am a cloud watcher too...In fact, I wish there were a few I could go watch right now...thanks for this...is now on my "to do" list... |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
As I write this I've got a number of thunder bumpers overhead. Most of the action takes place in the mountains to the north, but its fun to watch and listen. Sir Tabin... I think clouds are cool and so is your poem. I remember the first time I ever flew through them when I was seven. Big white fluffy ones. And the time I saw perfect cylindrical clouds in Montana... looking like tubular space ships. And now I get to listen to my kids finding shapes in the sky. Without clouds, the sky would be pretty damn boring. Yep! Ya gotta like dem clouds! |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Hello Seymour.... Some of my favorite moments have been spent in watching the clouds. It's like Nature's canvas in the sky! I live in a place where the clouds are low enough to touch. Thank you for this one! Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
Enjoyed it a lot!!!!!!  |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
So nice to read you again Sy... You always write the most lovely poetry... hugs K |
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BSC
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Member Elite
since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Seymour, There is nothing better than lying back on the grass on a warm summers day looking up and watching those clouds roll by. This is wonderful. Bonnie |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
YES! Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Serenity, Thank you my cloud watcher. Andrew, Yes they are a constant amusment. Sunny1, I've touched many a cloud. Vandana, Thanks for the enjoy. Severn, So nice to hear from you again. *L* BSC, Thanks for the wonderful. Sunshine, YEA. *L* |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Sy, This is the most beautiful poem I have ever read on clouds. Very well written Liz |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
All of our clouds, Sy, have lightning bolts coming out of them, as you well know  ...fodder for a follow-up poem.Good writing, Sy...... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, That's about the sweetest comment I ever got. Love Sy Balladeer, Thanks I'll see what I can do. |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
always a great read from Seymour ... this is no exception ... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
once again your rhyme is divine as is your meter, cadence, and time i read your words and i feel sublime by this poem's grace ... i now float on cloud nine awesome...YOU ARE later-amazing-vocabulary-gator jm |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
The epitome of "Lost in Space", eh??? I like the couplet best again - So - When you write a poem, do you start with the end and work your way back???...  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
MA Miller, Thank you much. Janet, Beautiful comment, gator aid. *L* Nan, Sometimes, *L* |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Look there in the distance, my dear Look there, watch the little clouds, Watch them closely as they come near, Cover you with grace, the lovely clouds. ...... Seymour, your magical pen has made the clouds so beautiful indeed... regards, sudhir |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
BEAUTIFUL! I have to say I get so much from watching the clouds...a sure inner peace. JUST BEAUTIFUL! Sauni Sauni :) Have you ever known the color grey when the nighttime finds you weak I have, I've walked that road each time; that's where my angel sleeps |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sudhir, Once again thank you my friend. Sanni, Onr beautiful delights me Two beautiful makes me humble. |
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JnR4eva Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 377Bronx, NY |
remarkable..now if we can just get the smog of new york to dispense, then i might be able to appreciate these clouds some more!!! i loved the imagery and the way you have painted a picture for us...this is a very nice piece "my love is my motivation my love is my inspiration perception of this poem is your interpretation" -- me |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Seymour~ Such splendid cloud-cover ! I think Florida sure can produce a show-stopper when it comes to the cloud formations. So glad to have you share a look at them. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JnR4ena, Thank you for the nice review. Marge, Thank you *L* |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Your eloquence is masterful, Seymour. Poetic felicity, to be sure. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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