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Rosebud1229
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0 posted 2000-08-16 12:45 PM


In my sexuality
Did I forget reality?
Did I forget to be in tune
with your heart?
Is that what makes us always seem to part?

Did my mind seem to bind up the love
we once shared?
Turn it into sadness that's all we seem to
have now.

Sex use to keep us in the sheets
but what happens when you
don't want that from the other?

Has our life's changed so dramatically
that soon you will passively walk by me
and not even recognize that I'm the one
that loved you through the good times and bad times

Did I forget we need to stay connected?
Somehow we've become two ships in the night.
How did we loose each other.
We're  caught in the eye of the storm.
All seems calm
but is it?

Is it easier to just let each day pass
without a tear?
Don't want to say these words to you again.
My heart is bleeding now
Then if I were to say them again
I would surely die.

So this you'll never know
for surely I have told you a million times
Yet I seem subdued
Yet you haven't got a clue.



[This message has been edited by Rosebud1229 (edited 08-16-2000).]

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ethome
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since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
1 posted 2000-08-16 12:57 PM


Reality of the heart is a great title and the words flow freely on the subject..well done!
Wilfred Yeats
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since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704
Wilmington, Delaware
2 posted 2000-08-16 05:45 PM


RoseBud -
This struck home - hit the bullseye in fact - Words I could have written myself and I wipe away tears as I type.



Sunnyone
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since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England
3 posted 2000-08-16 06:14 PM


Hello Rosebud....

    The line..."you haven't got a clue" just hit me so hard in this work! Why is it that the ones closest to us seem to not have any idea of what our needs are? This is such a well-penned poem, and it strikes a very familiar chord with me. Thank you for sharing it!


Today is a gift....
That is why they call it
'the Present'!



Rosebud1229
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4 posted 2000-08-16 07:11 PM


Thank you wilfred, ethome and sunny ,
and your right sunny it seems sometimes the ones closest to us don't have a clue, or maybe it's just that were taken forgranted at times.

Kit McCallum
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5 posted 2000-08-16 07:15 PM


Oh Rosebud ... your emotions come through so achingly clear in this verse. Incredibly well expressed, well done!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

Rosebud1229
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6 posted 2000-08-16 07:36 PM


thank you so much Kit. Sometimes it's so hard to express the way I feel it's always nice when other people can understand what I'm trying to express.
notlikely2
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since 2000-06-16
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UK
7 posted 2000-08-17 05:46 AM


Is this the Rosebud I know in that other place...
...or is this the real one?
Very well written,
even though you
make me sad.
J
x
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Love is like the mumps.....the older you are, the harder it hits you!




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Rosebud1229
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8 posted 2000-08-17 08:28 AM


I was having a sad day as you can see notlikely2 I'm much better today.. As you can see I wrote quite a bit. Yes I'm afraid this is me as well.
Mark Bohannan
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since 2000-06-21
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In the winds of Cherokee song
9 posted 2000-08-17 04:04 PM


Did I forget we need to stay connected?
Somehow we've become two ships in the night.
How did we loose each other.
We're  caught in the eye of the storm.
All seems calm
but is it?

How real you go with this one.  Communication breaks sink many relationships and you have presented this so well.  Wonderfully written.

ggrn3
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since 2000-08-17
Posts 433
Nahunta Georgia U.S.
10 posted 2000-08-17 06:22 PM


Rosebud
This definitely hit home. It seems that the more comfortable you get with your significant other, the more you take them  for granted.
Good poem.

You paint an excellent picture of relationships today.

Garfield

Knight Dreams
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since 2000-08-16
Posts 46
Austin, Texas
11 posted 2000-08-17 06:47 PM


Heart felt emotions here.  Pain displayed in your words.  I was left with hope that you may find what you have lost.  My prayer for you is that you find that connection once again while the rope still binds.  Best wishes
Rosebud1229
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since 2000-04-05
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North Carolina
12 posted 2000-08-17 10:36 PM


thanks  I do hope for that connection that once I felt, but it has been awhile.
CocoBaci
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since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043

13 posted 2000-08-17 10:47 PM


Hi Rosebud, the title caught my eye I admit however the expression you've shared in this one you write captured my heart.

Hugs2U
Coco  

Rosebud1229
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14 posted 2000-08-18 11:57 AM


thank you coco that is so sweet and I appreiate your reply so much.
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