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MMoonchild
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0 posted 2000-08-16 01:18 AM





Talking My Heart..."If and "When"

A Love Note...#2


"If" and "When" have come and gone
and "Gone" is here to taunt,
I'll tease you, in your pleasure mind
In dreams of yours, I'll haunt.

I'll fill you with my kiss thoughts, sweet
And touch you as you lay,
Waiting for that silken feel
to mold, to lead astray.

"If and "When" the right time shows
it's face to Moonlight tryst
With passion drops, of candied taste
Your lips, will then be kissed.

And flavoured yours, with that of mine
"If" only just a trace
"When" come is gone and gone remains
A smile, there'll be on face.

Maureen
8*16*2k




© Copyright 2000 Maureen - All Rights Reserved
Mark Bohannan
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since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song
1 posted 2000-08-16 02:03 AM


Once again I get to pass on another gold medal.....You have taken the challenge well and not missed a word of meaning at all.  You took the meanings of simple words and raised the bar for the next competitor.  Beautiful expession of love through your eyes.  Now step up to the podium and receive oyur gold.

Gonna go for all four?

MMoonchild
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2 posted 2000-08-16 03:05 AM


I am working on the third now...Mark...yes  all four the third is the hardest, though
~~soft smiles
Maureen

Kethry
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since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
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3 posted 2000-08-16 07:03 AM


Maureen loved the poem. I agree the third was the hardest as you can see by my results. Btw Don't you ever sleep. lol.
Be well
Kethry.

"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-

Sudhir Iyer
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since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium
4 posted 2000-08-16 10:28 AM


lovely work Maureen...
as always exquisitely done...

regards,
sudhir

MMoonchild
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5 posted 2000-08-16 02:09 PM


Kethry
I honestly meant to  go to sleep early last night but was reading  and noticed the challenge after I posted my 1000th and  became obsessed with  writing and completing it  and well no...I never slept but 3 hrs this morning and am feeling it now
~~softly yawning
Maureen

MMoonchild
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6 posted 2000-08-16 03:11 PM


sudhir

as always...thank you
~~softened smile
Maureen

Bill Charles
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since 2000-07-11
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highways, & byways, for now
7 posted 2000-08-16 07:54 PM


Hi Maureen,
Very special writing you have done. You do write from within, and I enjoyed this poem.

MMoonchild
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8 posted 2000-08-17 12:42 PM


Bill ....the words of Marks were just waiting for me to attack them and so I did  with heart
~~soft thanks
Maureen

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