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Paula Finn
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since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546
missouri

0 posted 2000-08-15 01:05 PM


If and when have
   come and gone
And gone is here
   to taunt
Did we give up
   too soon?
Did we try to
   hard
To make love
   happen between us?
Did we create a
   fantasy
That was just too
   real?
Too much too soon
   too real for you
If and when forgotten
   out of fear
Love left to die
   in the gone


  


[This message has been edited by Paula Finn (edited 08-15-2000).]

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Mark Bohannan
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song
1 posted 2000-08-15 01:24 PM


Regrets are none
upon "if's" that have passed
as each "when" carries with it
memories to forever last

Time for the now and thens
as each now is real
and thens are memories
from which not to steal

Your now is without me
and the thens are there
spread your wings and soar
you have much to share.

challenge met.(gold medal)


[This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (edited 08-15-2000).]

Butterflies_dont_cry
Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733
Michigan
2 posted 2000-08-15 02:51 PM


Can't help but feel this one Paula...Your heart shows within every line...Challenge met and exceeded with feeling~
Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people
3 posted 2000-08-15 02:55 PM


Wow, way to pass this challenge by with out a problem.  I wish it was that easy for everyone
SpitFire
Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396

4 posted 2000-08-15 02:56 PM


~This sure is overflowing with emotion. Paula,...WoW. Well done. All those questions after something like this fails....you have passed with honors, this challenge. Take care now. *Peace.
Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium
5 posted 2000-08-16 09:45 AM


Paula,
This is so well done...

regards,
sudhir

Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

6 posted 2000-08-16 11:09 AM


felt every line of this P,...
you know that I know ...quiet comfort i hope
you also know what i say about reality...
it BITES...*smile*
challenge well met...as I knew you would
take care
jm

Paula Finn
Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546
missouri
7 posted 2000-08-16 11:20 AM


Mark...thanks for the sweet reply

Bdc...I do tend to wear my heart on my sleeve...better there than locked away dont you think?

Lakewalker...LOL thank you...easy? if you only knew

Spitfire...I think you always question a failure...thats how you learn...thanks

Sudhir...thanks my friend

JM...I do know and I do take comfort in the sharing...you know what the real challenge was, and I think thats the one I get the medal for...and I still say reality is what you make it LOL

vandana
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Member Patricius
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463
USA
8 posted 2000-08-16 12:22 PM


I liked it very much!!!!!!
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