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Pale & Forgotten |
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Daniel_vv Member
since 2000-06-28
Posts 61 |
Pale & Forgotten My pale confusion itches away at my soul. I stand in the middle of your empty bedroom lost for emotions and drowning in thought. I lay myself down upon your fading shadow where once you dreamt that wishes would come true, I now lay crying that wishes would come true. My orange anger stares into Gods eyes. I stand in his presence, it feels like an empty room. I'm lost for emotions and drowning in thought. I hold myself back from cursing his shadow; where once I believed that he'd help the innocence I now ask him why he did not help her innocence? My blue memories are fading fast. I'm missing her more as I slowly forget her. Desperately I scramble to hold onto what's left, (of her) but its so hard, so dark, and so alone with out her here. Good-bye..... Good-bye my happy memories, Goodbye...... |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
DanielW~ This is plain downright sad. 'I'm missing her more as I slowly forget her' Oh ... how poignant ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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AniKay83 Member
since 2000-06-28
Posts 388Missing Since 1999 |
*sniffle*I agree with Marge, just downright sad! Beautiful poem though. I love the way you used colors and shades to set the mood. Loved it! ^_~ .*.*.*.KrissiE.*.*.*. I'm sorry for telling u love was unnecessary... making you lose ur way I'm sure I'll be as sad as u feel ~Touch and Go |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Beautiful poem showing an all too real struggle... this is truely sad. My blue memories are fading fast. I'm missing her more as I slowly forget her. Desperately I scramble to hold onto what's left, (of her) but its so hard, so dark, and so alone with out her here. Good-bye..... Good-bye my happy memories, Goodbye...... |
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JnR4eva Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 377Bronx, NY |
Truly tragic, yet beautifully written..I felt that pain ....my regards and warmest wishes "my love is my motivation my love is my inspiration perception of this poem is your interpretation" -- me |
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Daniel_vv Member
since 2000-06-28
Posts 61 |
Thnk you for taking the time to read my thoughts. |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
I echoe this thoughts to you. I feel so sad for you. I would only want to hold you tight just for a moment to ease your pain, thank you for sharing your poem. very well written |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh Daniel ... how sorrowful and yet tender your words are. They've left an ache deep within me. Sometimes memories consume us and we need to tuck them away, only temporarily. I know this all too well. They always return ... and with time, they become somehow a little lighter, a little fonder, a little easier. Lovely poem Daniel, take care. Best wishes, /Kit |
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Daniel_vv Member
since 2000-06-28
Posts 61 |
Thnk you for everything.... it means alot to me. |
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