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Sunnyone
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since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England

0 posted 2000-08-14 09:16 AM



   I am posting these two poems together, in
   celebration of my 1000th post. I owe the
   final beautiful touches to my partner in
   rhyme....Prometheus, (aka: Jamie). I would
   like to thank him once more for the answer,
                   "I would..."
                 to my question:
                   "Would You?"
       What would poetry be without poets to
          share their special thoughts?


                 "Would You?"                  

Would you wander through this world and dance with
           me across this naked land?
Would you still reach out to me, knowing how I long
               to take your hand?
Would you like to run through misty forests just
            before the break of dawn?
Would you chase the shadows one by one until the
              dark is finally gone?


                 "I would..."

              I would wander..
                I would dance..
                  I would reach out..
              And take the chance..
                I would run..
                  I would lay..
                    I would touch..
              And brush your fears away..


                 "Would You?"

Would you lay me down in fields of daisies in a
               meadow kissed by dew?
Would you gently touch my soul with words of love
             that come from only you?
Would you start a fire in my soul I can't control
                then walk away?
                      or..
Would you take me deep within your arms of love,
             and kiss my breath away?


                 "I would..."

              I would warm..
                I would stay..
                  I would hold you..
              And kiss your breath away..


                 "Would You?"

Would you wish upon a star while lying with me,
              naked in the night?
Would you dance with me while watching spirits
        dance within the Northern Lights?
Would you chase the cold within my heart, by
         songs of love on wings of fire?
Would you be the one to fill the need that grows
               within my heart's
                     desire?


                 "I would..."

              I would wish..
                I would sing..
                  I would desire..
              And fill that need..


                 "Would You?"

Of all the questions I have asked, the one that
          has the hardest words to say..
Is one that has been known to break the spell,
           and drive your lover away..
Just little words, once spoken, soon determine
         how one's life will surely be..
I'm asking of your heart, for my heart's sake:
              Just tell me, please...
               Would you love me?


                 "I would..."

              I would speak..
                I would show..
                  I would please..
                    ~ ~ ~ ~
                And love you so..




      Once again, my thanks to Jamie.....
         You made this posting special!!

                  


                  

< !signature-->

Today is a gift....
That is why they call it
    'the Present'!






[This message has been edited by Sunny1 (edited 08-14-2000).]

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Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

1 posted 2000-08-14 09:27 AM


WOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
congrats on your 1000th Sunny..
this is a very cool poem duet
creative and special indeed...
very nice...VERY
take care
jm

There are places inside our souls -
that have never been touched.
There are places inside our hearts -
that need to be loved this much.
~jm~


Sunnyone
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since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England
2 posted 2000-08-14 09:33 AM


Hi Janet Marie...

         Thank you so very much, and I'm
    glad this reply to you is the very first
         one of my new 1000!!!


Today is a gift....
That is why they call it
'the Present'!



Paula Finn
Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546
missouri
3 posted 2000-08-14 10:37 AM


I loved these both the first time thru and they make a great 1000th...thanks for all the inspiration you have provided me...and for all your kindhearted and generous replies. CONGRATS
Sunnyone
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since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England
4 posted 2000-08-14 10:49 AM


Paula...
      I wanted to thank you for your kind
      words. They sincerely mean a lot to
      me, especially today.
          If there is any inspiration,
      it comes from being able to share
      with you.


Today is a gift....
That is why they call it
'the Present'!



Jamie
Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168
Blue Heaven
5 posted 2000-08-14 11:39 AM


I am honored that you felt my words worthy of being cast together with your Sunny1.
As prolific a writer as you seem to be I am sure you will see 2,000 long before I.
Until then, Congratulations on the 1,000!

jamie

Mark Bohannan
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song
6 posted 2000-08-14 12:59 PM


WOW....congrats on  your 1000th and for making so many  of them to me....your works are always sunshine in my day.....This one is no exception by any means....It seems to be a perfect duet.
Sunnyone
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since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England
7 posted 2000-08-14 02:39 PM


Hello Jamie....
        
               Your poem truly did make
      mine complete.
               I thank you for your kind
      reply, and I hope we can share more
      thoughts and poetry on down the road!
                   Until then....
                   Keep writing....



Today is a gift....
That is why they call it
'the Present'!



Sunnyone
Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England
8 posted 2000-08-14 02:43 PM


Hi Mark....
  
             I'm so glad that I maybe put
     a little smile in your day, here and
     there. To me, that is what it's all
     about.
            Thank you for all the nice
            things you've written in your
            replies...that really has
            meant a lot to me.< !signature-->

Today is a gift....
That is why they call it
    'the Present'!




[This message has been edited by Sunny1 (edited 08-14-2000).]

catalinamoon
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since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone
9 posted 2000-08-14 02:55 PM


Sunny, how beautiful a duet. I loved this poem, and to see it combined with such beautiful answers, wow! And congrats on #1000.
Also as an aside to Jamie, So there really are men like you in the world.. I am happy to know that..
catalinamoon

Words are things, and a small drop of ink, falling, like dew, upon a thought produces that which makes thousands, perhaps millions think.
Lord Byron

Sunnyone
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since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England
10 posted 2000-08-14 03:52 PM


catalinamoon...

            Thank you for the congrats
       and nice thoughts. And, yes, there
       are still nice guys like Jamie in
       the world, and I think most of them
       are poets here at Passions!!!!!!!!

              Enjoy your day, my friend!


Today is a gift....
That is why they call it
'the Present'!



Marge Tindal
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Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores
11 posted 2000-08-14 09:43 PM


Sunny1 and Prometheus~
A delightful exchange !

Congrats on the 1000th post, Sun~
~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com



Sunnyone
Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England
12 posted 2000-08-14 11:34 PM



Thank you, Marge.......
   and thank you for all the help you've
   given me since I've been here at Passions.
            It has meant a lot!!


Today is a gift....
That is why they call it
'the Present'!



Eloise
Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096
Wyoming
13 posted 2000-08-14 11:41 PM


Wow, what charming questions and answers.  Really liked this one.  Congratulations on your 1000th post.  
Sunnyone
Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England
14 posted 2000-08-14 11:45 PM


Hi Eloise....

            I can't take credit for this
     poem entirely, as Jamie added the
     beautiful finishing touches! He does
     such wonderful work!!
            But speaking for both of us,
     thank you, and I will take the congrats!
     It sure has been fun, here!!


Today is a gift....
That is why they call it
'the Present'!



Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049
California
15 posted 2000-08-15 12:01 PM


I loved them both the first time, and together they complete the circle...and of course, answer the question.  Congratulations sunny!!
Sunnyone
Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England
16 posted 2000-08-15 12:30 PM



  Hi Martie...
              Oh, thank you for saying
        that and the congrats.........
        I have a long way to go to get
        to where you are, my friend,
        but it shall be fun all the way!!


Today is a gift....
That is why they call it
'the Present'!



linda munday
Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 315
Adelaide, Australia
17 posted 2000-08-15 12:48 PM


Hello again Sunny,

This poem captured me and is an outstanding achievement.  I congratulate both of you for making such beautiful concepts intertwine like they have.

I'm going back to read it again in a second.
I really loved the creativity and thought put into the poem.

1000 hey... congrats on that too.

Linda M.

Sunnyone
Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England
18 posted 2000-08-15 12:51 PM


Hi Linda...
           Thank you so much for stopping by!
           This poem, with Jamie's, has
           become very special to me.
               Yes, thanks for the congrats!


Today is a gift....
That is why they call it
'the Present'!



Bill Charles
Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now
19 posted 2000-08-15 06:10 PM


Hi Sunny,
Congratulations on the 1000th. My, that is a great number. Another excellent job on the poem that you have done with Jamie. I bow, in the talent of you.

Bill Charles
Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now
20 posted 2000-08-15 06:15 PM


Sunny,
For some reason the poem stayed where it was when I replied. So, I thought that I would try again.

Elizabeth Santos
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269
Pennsylvania
21 posted 2000-08-15 06:22 PM


First, congratulations on the iooo!
Second congratulations on a perfectly lovely poem. This is so heartfelt and beutifully written. You two write well together
Liz

Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium
22 posted 2000-08-16 05:51 AM


EXCELLENT WAY TO CELEBRATE the 1 posts...

WONDERFUL...
Great going SUNNY and please do keep them beauties coming....

regards,
sudhir

MMoonchild
Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715
PA
23 posted 2000-08-16 09:10 AM


Would you lay me down in fields of daisies in a
               meadow kissed by dew?
Would you gently touch my soul with words of love
             that come from only you?
Would you start a fire in my soul I can't control
                then walk away?
                      or..
Would you take me deep within your arms of love,
             and kiss my breath away?

loved this verse especially...congratulations !!!

~~sighing softly
Maureen
                

Marsha
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since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423
Maidstone Kent England
24 posted 2000-08-16 09:18 AM


Magic, that's all I can say! The way you spun the dream perfect. I love this
Sunnyone
Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England
25 posted 2000-08-16 12:02 PM



    To Bill, Elizabeth, Sudhir, Maureen,
               and Marsha.....

      I just wanted to say a special thank
      you to all of you!! I have always
      enjoyed your wonderful replies just
      as much as I enjoy writing.......
           Your friendship and sharing
              is what gives me such
                  inspiration!

           Thank you so very much...
              
                   Sunny1


Today is a gift....
That is why they call it
'the Present'!



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